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The Umbrella Hitch (Mg, loli, voy, slow) AnonyMPC 16/07/18(Mon)18:37 No. 24459 ID: a609fb

Sometimes people ask if I'm still writing. And I have been... I rarely stop, really, aside from occasional breaks, it just sometimes gets really slow.. And more annoyingly, I've just not been finishing a lot of stuff... some of what I get excited about writing peters out long before it's finished, leaving me with nothing postworthy. Frustrating, as you can imagine... it feels like a lot of writing for nothing, at least unless I get back to finish it one day. And maybe I will.

But at last, I finally have some stuff ready to go, save editing, and this is the first.

Before you ask, no, whatever ongoing project you were about to ask about is not one of the things I have waiting to post... it may well be somewhere in the mass of unfinished stuff piled up on my hard drive.

The Umbrella Hitch by AnonyMPC (Mg,loli, voy, slow)

Chapter One:

Sometimes I wonder if it was Fate after all, because so many events seemed to conspire to put me at that place and at that time, and if even one of them was different on that afternoon, I probably wouldn't have crossed paths with her.

First, there was that I got off work an hour early. One of my co-workers needed to pay for some emergency dental surgery, and most of us were letting him pick up an hour here or there from our shifts. I certainly didn't mind going a little early, although the weather made it complicated. That was the second thing. The best forecasts said it wasn't supposed to rain until the evening. Yet, just after 1pm, it started to drizzle. Ten minutes later, it was going hard. I'm talking torrential downpour. And it all happened just a few minutes before I started on my long walk home from work.

I didn't have my own car. Sometimes I was able to use my mother's, but usually she needed it, and that day I was out of luck. And there are buses, but not in a convenient straight line between my work and home. In order to get from one place to the other, I would have to make several transfers, waiting at each, often in the very weather I'd be trying to avoid. On the whole it took twice as long as just walking, which itself takes about half an hour. It was a pain in the ass and I kept telling myself to quit and try and get a more convenient job, but I didn't want it to reflect badly on my cousin, who recommended me.

As much as I sometimes complained about it, I didn't normally mind the walk, except in bad weather, where I was usually faced with the choice of either taking the long bus ride, or calling a cab. And after working a minimum wage job for eight hours, with a student debt I was trying to chip away at before next year's tuition got piled on top, not to mention trying to save up for my own place, it didn't feel right to waste two hours wages on cab fare, especially when I'd just sacrificed one.

I might have had to bite the bullet on that, but, luckily, I'd just bought a new umbrella the other day, and even though my weather app said the rain wouldn't start until the evening, I still had it stuffed in the school bag where I keep my work clothes. So, when I saw it starting to drizzle through the window, I was feeling smug about myself---and when it poured, I was in utter relief---that I wouldn't be too inconvenienced and absurdly pleased I'd get to try out my new umbrella. It was only a couple bucks and it had this weird gel-grip handle that I couldn't stop myself from squeezing whenever I saw it.

Holding the umbrella aloft for long periods, that handle was less comfortable than I imagined, but at least it fulfilled its primary purpose... it kept me dry as I trudged through the streets. With the umbrella in place, my major concerns were avoiding the huge puddles as I crossed the street and potentially getting splashed by cars driving through them.

I took a slight detour from my usual route to minimize the second problem, which had already gotten one leg of my pants wet, by choosing a street that wasn't as trafficked as my usual one. In this point in the day, it was downright quiet, and as far as I could tell, I seemed to be the only one walking along that particular road.

My earbuds were in and I had a particularly loud song playing, so although I was dimly aware of someone yelling out, "Hey, hey!" I didn't really pay attention up until my shirt was tugged at and I turned around in some surprise, half-expecting I was being mugged.

It turned out to be anything but. Standing before me was a young girl, probably not even a teenager, who came up to just past the height of my elbow, and was the epitome of the expression "98 pounds soaking wet." I'm not sure if that was her exact weight, but the "soaking wet" was no metaphor. Her dark hair was plastered against her head, and the white t-shirt stuck tight to her skin, except at the front where she'd rolled up the bottom to protect something. That was probably partly why she was bent over, too, not completely, but she looked almost like somebody in pain. With that look, and how her blue eyes were so wide and pleading my heart almost broke.

I pulled one earbud out so I could hear what she was saying. "Hey, guy. Can I walk with you?"

"What?" It was such an unfamiliar request I assumed I must have misheard.

"Can I walk with you? So I don't get wet?" She smirked and looked down at herself. "More wet, I mean."

It didn't seem like that would be possible. For her to be any more wet, it seemed, she'd have to be a sponge and leak when you squeezed her. Well, with one exception. Whatever she had in the wrapped up bottom of her shirt... it was probably wet too, by now, but possibly not completely soaked.

Chivalry, or at least common courtesy, kicked in. "Oh, yeah, sure."

She stepped under the umbrella and wiped back a lock of dripping hair with one hand. "Thanks. This rain really came out of nowhere, didn't it?"

"Yeah. How long were you out in it?"

"Not too long," she said. "When it started I got caught for a minute or two and I managed to get with somebody else, and she took me as far as the corner." She half-heartedly waved to the one I'd just passed. "But she had to turn, so I just waited under that door overhang thing for the first person going my way."

I smirked a bit. "Wait, so you're like, hitching?"

She seemed extraordinarily taken aback. "What?"

"You know, you're like an umbrella hitchhiker," I explained.

"Ohhhh," she said, and then she smiled back, a genuine smile. "Yeah, I guess. It just comes naturally, though." Her smile widened. "'Cause my last name's 'Hitch.'." That explained why she was surprised, she thought I was referring to her name.

"Well, then, how can I refuse, a hitch from a Hitch?" I continued the dumb joke. "Well, I can take you as far as Elm, Miss Hitch, but then you're on your own." It was the first thing I could think of other than suggesting the traditional hitchhiker payment. "Ass, Grass, or Cash," which didn't seem appropriate with a girl her age.

She gave me a "Heh," mostly out of courtesy I think, which was more than the joke deserved, and then told me, "My first name's Astrid."

"I like that name," I said automatically. It immediately made me think the girl in the How To Train Your Dragon movies, even though she didn't look much like this girl. She smiled at the compliment, so I continued. "I'm Karl. No school today?" I was officially off, save for one last exam at the end of the week, but the elementary and high schools ran for almost another month, unless things had changed dramatically in the last couple years without me noticing.

"It was a half-day," she explained. I wasn't sure whether to believe her, considering I hadn't seen any other kids wandering about, but it was raining and, to be frank, if she was playing hooky... it really wasn't my problem. I was just making conversation, and whether she had school seemed like an appropriate thing to ask, at least.

The same went for the next question, which occurred to me when I glanced down at her and noticed her hands, which were still cradled protectively around the bundled up bottom of her shirt, even though the rain was no longer on her. "Your phone's not waterproof, I'm guessing?"

"What? I don't have a phone. Unfortunately." Then she looked down and realized I was referring to what she was holding so tightly. "Oh, no, it's a book! I was coming home from the library when it started pouring."

She unrolled the cloth and revealed what she'd been protecting from the rain at the expense of anything else. The book was an old paperback copy of The Lord of The Flies.

"Oh, nice," I said, genuinely impressed, not at the book itself, but the mere fact that she was reading it.

Her head twitched for a moment, like she was surprised to be getting that kind of reaction, instead of disinterest or scorn. Maybe that's what made her ask, "You've read it?"

"In school, yeah." I was maybe fourteen or fifteen when it was assigned for English, at least to the best of my recollection. Even though I was just in college, already my high school years were becoming fuzzy. Astrid did not look fourteen, though. "How old are you?"

"Twelve," she said.

"Did your school assign that?"

"No, I just like reading. I read loads of stuff, for fun."

I looked down at her, smiling a warm, encouraging smile, and I said, "Well, consider me impressed." Which was probably the worst possible time to say that, because it was right while I was speaking the word that I noticed her nipples.


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The Halloween Hitch, Chapter Nineteen AnonyMPC 16/10/17(Mon)03:18 No. 24744 ID: a609fb

Chapter Nineteen:

I circled around the bed, but there were no piles of clothes anywhere, aside from my own, just her purse and shoes, and glasses, nothing made of cotton or silk, which made me relieved and somehow disappointed at the same time. Just as, even though when I looked at her, peaceful on my bed, I wanted to protect her, there was some part of me that wanted to do the kind of things that I was so worried people would assume if they caught her here. I can't remember ever having sets of feelings that were so contradictory when Astrid wasn't around.

Her eyes flew open as though she could read minds. "What?" At least she remembered to whisper.

"Nothing," I said, feeling embarrassed for having been caught looking, and made a show of inspecting the floor. "Just trying to decide where I'm going to sleep."

Her face relaxed into a beautiful, natural smile. "We can share. I mean, it's your bed." I shook my head, and Astrid's smile faded and she rolled her eyes. "There's plenty of room. We won't even be touching." She had a point, the bed was a decent size, and she was very little. Still, it didn't seem right. "Fine, then, I'll take the floor." She sat up and swung a leg over the side of the bed.

"No, no, stay."

"How am I gonna sleep knowing I'm stealing your bed?" I winced at the volume. She wasn't exactly loud, but this time, she had forgotten to whisper, and I was oversensitive. I put my finger to my lips, and she looked guilty for a moment, then smiled with a glint in her eye. "So do you want to argue about this more, or will you just get in the bed?" I gave her a glare, but circled around to the other side of the bed. "Turn off the light, too, kay?"

I hit the switch, went to the computer to quickly switch to my "music to sleep by" playlist, then returned to sit on the bed beside her, on top of the covers. The light from the street, not to mention my computer screen and clock, all provided just enough illumination to see by, which is how I often slept anyway, but now it meant we could still see each other, especially as she'd rolled back to face me. "See?" she whispered. "It's not so bad like this." Her eyes flicked up and down my legs. "You usually sleep on top of the covers?"

"Tonight I do," I said. "And with clothes on." She snorted softly, even though she'd already obeyed that rule. So my pointing it out seemed exceptionally prudish, even to me. "Just... try and get some sleep." She giggled, a short quiet one that was still too loud for comfort. "What?"

"Nothing," she said. "It's just I've never shared my bed with a pirate before." Another giggle. I'd hoped the drunkenness had worn off, but apparently it came and went. Maybe lying down had done something, sent a fresh rush of alcohol to her brain. "Good thing I can trust you, huh? I don't have to worry about you trying to ravish me."

Ravish? Of course Astrid would use a word that's probably only ever used in books. I tried to "shhh" her, and she said, mercifully quietly but still more active than I would have liked. "Don't worry, I'll be quiet. I promise. Even if you do try to ravish me." I could swear I could feel her breath in my ear on the last part, and I squeezed my eyes shut and rolled away from her, hoping she'd get the point. It seemed like she did at first, for she was quiet except for a little bit of shifting around in the bed. Until finally I felt a gentle tap-tap on my shoulder. "Karl?" she whispered. "Thank you for letting me stay. I'm sorry. I know you don't like me."

I sighed. "I like you, Astrid," I said, and it was true, although now wasn't her most endearing moment. "It's just... very hard right now." I realized too late that I could have worded that better, but either the innuendo went over her head or she gracefully decided to ignore it. "Just try and get some sleep. Or is the music too loud?" I didn't want to lower it too much, but if it was keeping her from sleeping better that than us keep talking. Conversation, actual conversation... it has a rhythm you don't get from music or even most scripted shows, and even if Mom couldn't hear words, I was afraid she might somehow notice that rhythm.

"No, I like it," she said, and was quiet, and soon that was the only sound there was, the soft music, sometimes louder or more fast paced, but all familiar and comforting enough that, to my great surprise, I soon found myself drifting off to sleep.

I awoke several times that night, for different reasons and for different lengths of time. A song louder than expected, a clearing of the throat from Astrid, an inadvertent bump, all of them could trigger it me lurching awake. I'm normally a pretty sound sleeper, and this was the least restful night I could remember outside of the night before a big exam.

The first of the more notable interruptions was, there was a text, or something, from Astrid's phone, that made a soft sound, a vibration, not a chime. She quickly got up, whispered, "Sorry, sorry," and silenced it, spent a second reading whatever notification she got, and typing in a quick reply, then put it away and got back into bed.

"What was it?" I asked.

"It's nothing. I turned it off."

I suppressed a sigh of frustration and tried to get back to sleep. Before it could happen, I felt her sitting up again, and when I looked she tugged up at the bottom of her sweater. "Clothes on," I reminded her softly.

"Just the sweater," she said, equally softly. "It's just I'm too hot." Yes, that was one of the problems. But I could see her point as well.

"Okay, But the shirt stays on." She didn't answer, just completed taking off the sweater, lay it casually beside her, and she loosened but didn't remove the tie. When she lay back down, I closed my eyes again, not think about the fact that I was turned towards her instead of away, and pulled the covers back over me, too.

Yes, though a process I can only attempt to reconstruct after the fact, I somehow had gotten under the covers with her, albeit not touching her. It's hard to sleep on top of covers, I think, your mind, once it gets sleepy enough, remembers that something's not quite right while it forgets the reason for it, and attempts to correct it. I think that I had slid to the far side of the bed, and later, once Astrid had stolen the covers from me, semiconsciously tugged them back, on top.

I barely even thought about it at the time, but the next time I woke up, it was with my hand on her thigh and I remembered why it was I tried to face my side of the bed, and sleep on top of the covers . I quickly pulled away, onto my other side, but thought attempting to get rearrange the covers would be a waste of effort, and besides, after noticing the physical contact, I had an erection that I'd rather hide under covers and clothes than just in pirate pants. I took a few deep breaths, willed it down, and tried to quiet my mind.

The next thing I knew, I heard boots stomping up the stairs, and with a mighty crack, the police were bursting through my door. Astrid's mom put out an Amber Alert on her daughter, and they'd tracked her location by her phone, and caught her in my bed. Worse, she'd ignored my instructions and taken off all the rest of her clothes in the night and when they burst in she was naked and in a position where it looked like to them she was about to suck my cock.

What could I do? I tried to explain, but nobody would believe me. I was in prison for life, and a couple thugs were closing on me, sizing me up for a beating or gang-rape, and I had just enough time to realize that it was awfully odd that I'd been tried and sentenced within a few minutes of being caught when my eyes opened and I realized that I was still in my bed.


Anonymous 16/10/17(Mon)17:20 No. 24746 ID: b8beaa

This is so good, OP...
Seriously, despite being painfully slow and seeing practically nothing, it's amazing.

The Halloween Hitch, Chapter Twenty AnonyMPC 16/10/17(Mon)18:19 No. 24747 ID: a609fb

Chapter Twenty:

Nightmares... they're not like they are in the movies, at least for me. I didn't scream out. I didn't bolt upward into a sitting position, covered in sweat. I barely even moved, in fact. My eyes just snapped open and my heart was going in overdrive, but soon I realized that it was just a dream. An alarmingly plausible dream, though, the accelerated timeframe notwithstanding. I was on my back, and so I looked over in Astrid's direction. She was turned away from me, and to my relief seemed to still be clothed, but that relief was short lived as I noticed her breathing was strange, like a series of regular short gasps. And she wasn't still, either, she was trembling or twitching.

After one irrationally calm moment reflecting how interesting it was that we were both having nightmares at the same time (maybe we really were in synch!) I started to panic again. I might have never woken up screaming from a nightmare, but for all I knew, Astrid might. I grit my teeth and decided to make a move... waking her now might startle her, but at least I'd be ready for it. If she woke as the dream reached its ultimate climax, I couldn't guarantee that. So I turned over, got one hand ready to clap over her mouth in case she started to yell, and gently nudged her shoulder with the other. "Astrid!" I whispered, putting my hand down, very gently, on her mouth just to suppress any moment of alarm. "It's okay. It's just me."

She stilled immediately when I put my hand on her, tensed up, but didn't make a sound, at least not for a few seconds, and finally I took my hand away and pulled away. She said, very quietly, "What the hell?"

"Sorry!" I regretted the action, realizing that my putting my hand on her probably scared her more than whatever she was dreaming about. "You looked like you were having some kind of nightmare."

"Oh," she said. "Uh... thanks. I'm okay now. Really." She flipped onto her back, breathing a little more heavily but a lot more regular, and her arm and legs moved around under the cover for a few seconds, like she was scratching an itch.

Assuming she was just trying to calm herself down with physical sensation, to remind herself the difference between the real world and a particularly scary dream world (as I sometimes did), I offered, "Do you want to talk about it?" By now, between my nightmare and panicking about Astrid's nightmare, I was wide awake again for a while, and I thought maybe talking about it might make her less scared of it and better able to sleep. Moments after I made the offer, I once again grew bizarrely hard for no reason I could figure out, nor could I understand why, this time, it didn't go away so easily. It wasn't as though I was aroused by talking about nightmares or anything weird like that.

Not that that was ever in the cards. "No. I don't really remember," she said. And she went quiet, leaving only music for what seemed like a minute or so, I heard, "Karl?"


"Do you think..." Hesitation, and she rephrased. "I mean... say it was the end of the world. Like Fallout or whatever." I knew what was coming, but I couldn't cut her off this time. In fact, my cock gave a fresh swell of anticipation. "Do you think you might, like, want to date me?"

"It's not a matter of want, Astrid," I said, knowing it was a mistake, that it would only encourage her, and yet I couldn't stop myself. And the way my erection was threatening to turn my pirate pants into a pirate flag proved that at least part of me wanted it very much. I turned onto my side, again facing away from her, trying to look like I was just trying to get back to sleep but at the farthest part of the bed from her. "It's that I don't think it'd be good for you."

"Well, if we were in Fallout, it would be, wouldn't it? I mean, what better choice am I going to have? I mean, I might wind up with a slaver or raper."

"Raider," I corrected.

"Whatever. I might wind up with a raider."

"Maybe. But we're not in Fallout."

"We could pretend." And she shifted in the bed, and I felt her arm go over my waist as she scootched in close, like we were already lovers. If I'd done that to her, she'd be feeling my penis... and as it was, she was very close to that from another angle, her hand on my belly just above. The thought didn't make it shrink, if anything it tried to stretch and reach her.

"Astrid," I said, in something of a warning whisper, but I dared not put too much venom in it. It struck me again how precarious a situation it was. We were communicating in whispers and I was in constant fear of being overheard. It made every objection sound weak and hollow. I couldn't yell at her. I couldn't storm away. Even if my whispered words grew too harsh, I risked making her cry, and if there's one thing a mother can hear over anything it's a crying child. And none of this made any difference to my penis, which was still refusing to acknowledge the danger, except as an excuse, like it was manipulating me with it, telling me that, maybe, it was even too dangerous to refuse her at all. I felt like I had to ignore that part of me though. "This isn't a good time to discuss this."

"We're being quiet," she said, practically just breath in my ear with a hint of pattern. "I mean, I could be louder, if I wanted to. But I can control myself. I won't be loud, I promise." Was that a threat? Or a genuine promise that she wouldn't get loud and upset no matter what happened? Or was Astrid savvy enough to realize that even a sincerely-meant promise not to get loud carried with it the reminder that she could ruin me at any time?

I felt like laughing bitterly for a moment... Mom would say that the whole reason this kind of relationship was wrong in the first place was the unfair power dynamic... but really, Astrid was the one with the power here. If she knew enough, and was ruthless enough, to say, "Be my boyfriend or l tell everyone," then I wouldn't have any choice but to comply. I waited, half-hoping she would say those very words.

Instead, she sounded sad as she said, still quietly, "I know, you don't really want me. I mean..." And here, her hand strayed downward, like she already knew what she'd find there, and that hard, traitorous part of my body lurched towards her hand, cursing the pirate pants and thin boxers between us. "A little maybe. But not as a girlfriend." What could I say. Luckily she didn't grab, or I might have shot off in my pants, or moaned, or jumped, but instead it was just a slow rub through fabric. She let off. "It's okay. But I still think you're part of my karass." That sounded nice, but I didn't really believe in the concept, that we were destined to be entwined in each other's lives. To my relief, she slid back, her body shuffling around the covers, and I thought she had given up and returned to her side of the bed for the night, but then she dropped the bombshell. "That's why I think we should have sex anyway."


The Halloween Hitch, Chapter Twenty-One AnonyMPC 16/10/18(Tue)03:49 No. 24750 ID: a609fb

Chapter Twenty-One:

I had to turn onto my back and look at her, even though I still had this traitorous erection, one she already knew about, which is why, I thought, I needed to look her in the eyes and be convincing when I told her, "No." I couldn't have sex with her. Well, I could, but it would be wrong.

"Hear me out," she whispered, and I didn't really have a choice, short of raising my voice. "You said you're worried about what's good for me. If that's true, you should... you know. Be my first, right now." I waited in silence to see if she had any explanation or if that was the entirety of her argument. It seemed remarkably persuasive enough as it is, even if I knew I was still going to have to turn her down. But she spoke again, "Because I'm going to do it, one way or another. I've made up my mind. Soon. Just to get it over with. To know what it's like." Her voice sounded wistful, awed, like it was a great mystery she'd been wondering about for years... but of course, that could have been the whisper doing that. "So it can either be with you, and safe... or be with someone else I'm less sure about. I know you won't hurt me. Or tell everyone. Or even get obsessed with me if I decide later I don't want to do it again."

She moved quickly then, far more quickly than I would have expected. She flung the cover back, and rolled on top of me, pinning me down... although, in truth, I could have thrown her off, if I had to, I felt frozen in place. She was straddling me, on my stomach more than my waist, which meant that my throbbing cock wasn't crushed, but merely more pinned by the fabric, and bumping up into her ass-crack... which might have been more torturous, in its subtle way, than if she had actually sat on it. She was still wearing the Harry Potter outfit, except for the sweater top, and, also, now I could tell that, although she'd followed my instructions to keep the shirt on... all of the buttons were undone. That was potent knowledge, even though I couldn't actually see well inside because she was mostly backlit. What I could see was her looking down at me intently as she held me gently down, her hands on my wrists which were resting above my head so that I wouldn't reach out and touch her. "You're my friend, right? Friends don't let friends have bad first times."

"It's not that simple. You could get pregnant." I hoped that would scare her out of this insanity.

"No I can't, I'm on the pill. And I'm ready. Feel." She straightened her back and pulled my arm down, without any resistance, and it went under her skirt, made contact with her warm thigh, and then towards where her panties would be... if she hadn't also removed them.

It was smooth, soft, warm, and above all, wet. Extremely wet. There was a faint smell, not unpleasant, and not strong... if she hadn't been right on top of me I might not have noticed, at least not consciously. It smelled unmistakably sexual. And it suddenly occurred to me what a fool I was... she wasn't having a nightmare at all when she was twitching beside me, she was wide awake. If I hadn't interrupted her maybe she would have taken care of herself and not gotten so bold with the person she with whom she already shared a bed and, in her mind, a special connection.

A part of me still screamed that this was wrong. On the other hand... this was her decision, she was making all the moves. What she was doing to me was practically sexual assault, if I wanted to claim it... if our ages were reversed, or if our ages were the same and I'd done this to her, it would certainly be considered such. Of course, realistically speaking if it ever went to court, even the situation as it was would probably, somehow, be considered me assaulting her.

It didn't feel like assault though, in either direction... it felt like an offer, and more, a genuine plea. Maybe she really was curious enough to just do it with some random person... or, call it what it is, she was horny. I was, at her age, the only difference was, I wasn't able to find anyone who wanted to until much later. She would be. There didn't seem like much of a shortage of people who might be willing, especially if she turned to the Internet. And whoever did find her, who took advantage of that desire... they might be bad people.

Or maybe they'd be like me, convinced they were good people even while doing something they knew deep down they shouldn't be doing.

"Look what time it is," she said, and my eyes went to the illuminated digital clock. It was 1:38. It meant nothing to me, until she said, "The clocks jump back tonight. If we do it now, tomorrow, it'll be like it never happened." It was the most ridiculous logic I'd ever heard.

But right then, at least, it seemed like just another excuse to say yes. It was Manic Pixie Dream Girl logic, and it just sang to that part of me that always wanted one. What's more, my body was already leaning that was already. I had been unconsciously rubbing her slit since she'd put my hand there, but I only now noticed it.

Desire might have won out over morality by that point, but self-preservation still had sway. I pulled my hand away. "I can't. Not... now, at least. Maybe later, but... if anyone heard us..."

"Later you'll just say no." She was probably right about that, right now my hormones were overwhelming my common sense. Once I'd calmed down, I was sure I'd make the right choice. "I can be quiet," she promised, and let go of my hand, leaned into me, nuzzling into my neck, and at the same time, sliding backward. "Please." My pirate pants, boxers, and maybe the folds of her schoolgirl skirt still provided a barrier between her hole and my throbbing cock, but it was close. "If I make noise, you can just cover my mouth." Closer, now, like my cock didn't just grow but I thrust against her ever so slightly, as though my hips acted of their own accord. "Just... do me right." Just that, not "Do me right now," which maybe I could find myself, refuse, but "Do me right," like I was already doing her right now, but half-assing it. And if I was already going to hell, I might as well do it in style.

Justifications, rationalizations, they can often seem ridiculous after the fact, especially where sex is involved. I didn't understand that before then... I privately scoffed at every time in a TV show where someone said "It just happened!" because they cheated, or woke up with someone they shouldn't have, but now it was happening to me. It was just happening. For ridiculous reasons that somehow seemed very convincing, and most of all because it seemed like she wanted it. It was easy to refuse when she was just a temptation, forbidden fruit. When what she wanted didn't mean a thing, and it was all about me and what some perverted part of me wanted versus what I knew was proper behavior, choosing to be the good guy was the obvious choice. But the more I'd spent time with Astrid, the harder it became to dismiss what she wanted as something that didn't matter, to deny this wish to a girl I genuinely cared for. I had no reason to believe she didn't really, truly want this and was sure would soon find a way to make it happen with me or somebody else. I wanted this, or at least most of me wanted to give in to her wishes. My body wanted me to, my heart wanted me to. My mind gave up the fight it had no hope of winning and switched to making sure it lost as safely as possible. "We have to be very, very quiet."


The Halloween Hitch, Chapter Twenty-Two AnonyMPC 16/10/18(Tue)04:34 No. 24751 ID: a609fb

Chapter Twenty-Two:

Astrid pushed back up on her arms like she was trying to read my expression, like maybe she was afraid I was just teasing or something, but as soon as she decided I wasn't, she began nodding excitedly, and made a gesture that I think was supposed to be a "my lips are sealed" motion.

Now that I'd given up, given in, I had to realistically consider how to do this, to have manage to have sex with an underage girl while my mother rested downstairs. I still seemed impossibly risky, but I was committed. So, after thinking for a few seconds about the logistics, I reached out and put my hands on her sides, under her shirt, still nervous about the prospect of touching her despite what I'd already decided to do, but not letting it stop me as I gently guided her to the side and off my body. Her on top might have been the best position all in all, but I wanted leverage if I needed to cover her mouth, and I needed space to get my pants lowered. And, in truth, I wanted to see her better. With her on top of me, at least at that position, most of the light came from behind, so while I could still see her, the details of her features, the subtler expressions on her face, they were hard to make out, and I needed to see... not just because she was adorable, but for any sign of second thoughts. For as much as the media tells us that a girl Astrid's age couldn't consent, in my heart, I felt she could... not just because she had practically thrown herself to me, but for another, deeper reason. For, no matter how much I wanted to have sex with Astrid right then, I was certain that I'd have stopped the moment she changed her mind. Consent, my mother had drilled into me when I was young, was an ongoing thing, it could be withdrawn at any time and you had to respect it no matter how far along you are. If Astrid hadn't given me consent, there was no reason to be concerned that she might take it away, and that just seemed irresponsible. But, yes, also because... maybe I'm crazy, but if I'm going to take a risk like this, to have sex with a young girl who could get me thrown in jail, I at least want to see her enjoying it.

She seemed to already be enjoying it, or at least the realization of what was about to happen. Her face was bright, eager, her teeth showed in her smile, but soon it wasn't her smile I was looking at. Her hands went to her schoolgirl skirt and yanked it up, but not off. In making this motion, the dress shirt also fell more to the side, exposing her nipples, the ones that got me into this mess in the first place, but although I felt a spurt of warmth at their sight, like spotting an old friend, I was still more interested in the part I felt but hadn't yet seen, at least not directly for any extended period. That was like uncovering a beautiful work of art, even though it didn't seem that different from things I'd seen in porn, albeit tinier. Her vulva glistened and there was a visible hole and folds in between the two edges, and a perky nub at the top, but it was otherwise compact, tiny, yet alluring. Also somewhat unexpected, she did have hair, though, just a little, sparse, more like ornamentation of her mound, drawing attention down to the slit, rather than concealing anything.

I got on my knees and watched her eyes, as I moved my hand into position at the top of my pants, for any sign of doubt. Seeing none, only curiosity, excitement, anticipation, I finally unleashed my inner beast. I was hard enough that my foreskin retracted, and if she noticed any difference between mine and other penises she'd seen online (assuming she had seen some, but I was sure anyone as curious as her looked it up at least once) she didn't give any sign, save for leaning back and spreading her legs more. No preliminaries, no porn-plot-esque offer to suck it, she was here for a defining moment and the moment was what she was waiting for.

I wasn't in such a rush. I got closer, sure, carefully moved myself into position between her legs, but I wanted to give her a little bit of time to back out. I went back to rubbing her with my thumb and one finger, pressing ever so gently in, judging not only the tightness but also her tendency to make noise.

The only noise was a change in her breathing, like she was holding it when it got too intense, until she had to let go. As for tightness... it was tight, but also yielding, at least at the hole. Still, I needed to warn her, which I did with a whisper while looking her in the eyes. "You know it sometimes hurts the first time, right?" She nodded, and clapped her own hand over her mouth, like a promise.

I pressed into her with my thumb, gradually, feeling her take me in squeeze me, getting into the first knuckle and returning covered in gleaming slime. In all that time, she'd just given the softest squeak, barely audible through her hand. I couldn't resist, I put the thumb to my own mouth and tasted. It tasted like nothing and everything at once, which is to say, it tasted like my thumb, mostly. It wasn't really the flavor that had excited me so, but the knowledge of what I was tasting, how wrong it was, how right it felt (especially with the delighted look in her eyes as my thumb, which had been in her, was now on my tongue). All of that imbued the moment with so much more enjoyment, more erotic power, that my dick jumped in readiness.

I was ready to go, more than ready, but I wanted another taste, wanted to give Astrid time to back out... or, to be honest, I hoped at this point to give her another reason not to back out, and so I leaned forward, like I was pulling her hips and butt upward to where I could enter her more easily, but instead, I moved my mouth to her instead, wriggling my tongue inside her hole and then, once I heard another of those soft squeals, pulled out, letting my tongue trail near her clit, which seemed to pulse with a heartbeat of its own.

I pulled back up, holding her legs just slightly off the bed, and looked Astrid in the eyes. She took the hand off her mouth and gave me the tiniest nod, like she was saying, "Do it." Or maybe "Do that same thing again."

But I felt like I had to give her one last chance, to confirm her consent which also would convince myself that she could give it in the first place. "You can still change your mind," I told her, and then lied, "It won't disappoint me."

"I want it."

Okay then. But there was one last thing. She didn't make much noise with my thumb inside her, or my tongue, but there was some, and what was about to enter her was a lot bigger and would go a lot deeper. I couldn't trust her to cover her own mouth, to not cry out. "I'm going to cover your mouth at first, okay?" She nodded. "If it hurts or you can't breathe or you just change your mind, just... lick my hand, okay? I'll stop right away."

"I'm ready. I want your cock."

Wow. Manic Pixie Dream Girl in the streets, Porn Star in the sheets. Though even as she said it, there was some hesitation between the words, like that phrase didn't come naturally to her, but it was something she knew was said at times like these. And maybe because of that, my dick did another jerk. I did the last bit of positioning needed so that my dripping cock was pushed up against her hole, then put my hand over her mouth. A squirt of precum landed inside her slit, like it was preparing the way, and I looked her over one last time, up and down. Her pussy was twitching, like a mouth trying to give a kiss. One of her nipples was covered by the Gryffindor tie, but the other, I could see, was a hard erect little bead, something I didn't even expect would be possible on someone her age. And most importantly, her eyes, even though my hand was covering her mouth, seemed to be urging me on. Feeling no tongue on the inside of my palm, I pushed forward.


The Halloween Hitch, Chapter Twenty-Three AnonyMPC 16/10/18(Tue)06:22 No. 24752 ID: a609fb

Chapter Twenty-Three:

It was almost anticlimactic, in a way, which I guess is a horrible way to refer to anything sexual, but I only mean there were no moments of drama involved in the entry itself. There was no forcing my way in, no tearing of any thin membranes inside of her, no tears, no screaming barely contained by my hand. I pushed in against a steady but forgiving tightness. The only sign of any difficulty at all on her end was from feeling the erratic exhalations out of her nose on the edge of my hand. Before too long I was inside of her, with only about an inch of my shaft left outside. Maybe I could have even gone balls deep, but it was growing progressively more difficult to push further, and I didn't want to risk hurting her. I'd already taken her virginity unless she'd lied about that, and I didn't think she did, despite no evident hymen.

What the experience lacked in drama though, it made up in pleasure. The part of me that was inside her felt incredible, enveloped in a soft warm tightness that it felt like it was made for. At least it felt that way to me, but I wasn't the only one there. "You okay?" I asked, looking down at my partner, making sure she wasn't uncomfortable. She nodded under my hand. Well, if she was okay with it, there was one thing missing, that would have made the sensation perfect. "I'm going to start moving." I felt her lips move, and I wondered for a second if she was going to lick, but I soon realized it was a smile I was feeling. She still wanted this.

I pulled out, and pushed back in, soon building up a slow rhythm that seemed a good counterpoint to the song currently whispering out of the speakers. I'll remember that song forever now, "Cool Kids" by Echosmith. I remember thrusting forward on the words "cool kids", "fit in" and wondering if I was reinforcing the idea in Astrid's head that this is what cool kids did. Our bodies bumped together and apart at a slow, leisurely pace, more like some kind of slow dance than sex, and at the very least a far more gentle fuck than you might imagine from a guy covering a little girl's mouth. If you could call her a little girl. She certainly didn't feel like one as we fucked tenderly in the dark.

Nor did it feel entirely one-sided... her legs progressively wrapped around me and after the first few thrusts she pushed in when I did, her pelvic muscles squeezed with a gentle but insistent motion, like her goal was giving me as much pleasure as possible. This seemed even more true when she reached down with one of her hands, not, as other girls I'd been with had, to rub her own clit and get herself closer to orgasm, but rather to feel me, my cock as it slid in and out of her and that last inch or so that still wouldn't go in and cover it with manually transferred lubrication. She also rubbed at the point of our intersection a fair bit, and so maybe it wasn't entirely selfless, but at those times it felt more like she was reassuring herself that it really was going inside her than that she was trying to squeeze some more pleasure for herself.

But that didn't mean that she got no pleasure from it. Or maybe it was from me. Because I could hear, feel even, little moans through the palm of my hand. We hadn't even been going at it that long, but then, she'd had a head start on me.

It was probably for that reason more than anything that she came before I did. I guess the fact that I was moving slowly so as to make the least amount of noise as possible also contributed. This wasn't headboard-banging-against-the-wall sex that I'd had with other girls, it was slow and gentle, like I was an ocean wave advancing and retreating without even as much force as to destroy a sandcastle except through slow erosion. But sometimes, that's enough, and especially with her own fingers in play, and I felt her body stiffen tightly and then.... relax, like jelly, and her eyes rolled up in her head, even her breath temporarily stopped. Only one part had not stilled, the muscles surrounding my cock which seemed to be in spasm every second or so.

I slowed down some to enjoy the sensation, but as the length between spasms lengthened, I couldn't wait anymore, I needed my own orgasm, so when I felt her breathe one long exhalation out through her nose followed by it slowly returning to a normal rhythm, I once again picked up my pace, maybe even going a little faster than before.

I was planning on pulling out because, even if she was on the pill, they're not 100% reliable, but the selfish, hedonistic part of me wanted to get as close to the edge as I could before I pulled out. I wasn't sure where I was going to shoot it... this part hadn't exactly come up in my hasty planning... but I knew I didn't want to finish inside her.

What I wanted ceased to matter the moment I began to hear the weak but recognizable sounds coming from outside of my room, the creaks and thumps of somebody climbing the stairs.

"Shhh," I whispered, as quietly as I could and I felt Astrid nod. I'd frozen in mid-thrust... I didn't dare move in any way... it seemed like even pulling out would risk my bed making a noise that might make Mom think I was still awake and that it was okay to check in on me. Or she might be headed that way anyway, to ask me to lower the music, or even just peek in to watch me sleeping, something I knew she'd done sometimes when I was little but hoped she'd given up. So, I was frozen, as deep inside Astrid as I'd ever been, for I heard the noise while I was on the in-thrust.


The Halloween Hitch, Chapter Twenty-Four AnonyMPC 16/10/18(Tue)18:03 No. 24753 ID: a609fb

Chapter Twenty-Four:

A funny thing happens when you're already extremely close to orgasm and you just... stop. At least, it happens to me, your genitals may vary. On the rare times this happens, my cock feels like it it's practically vibrating, and more, like it's spewing out a steady, weak stream of cum, like I'd turned off the faucet but not all the way. It's an illusion, mostly... I mean, there's usually a fresh gush of precum or two, but from inside, it feels like a constant dribble, more coming out with every heartbeat. I don't normally suffer with it for long, because the urge to make a few more strokes is almost irresistible, but at this moment, my cock buried in Astrid's pussy and me petrified, worried that any moment my Mom might come in and catch me in the worst of compromising positions, that wasn't an option, so I was left just waiting, feeling like I was squirting into this girl the whole time.

It seemed like forever, hearing my mom climbing the stairs, my heart pounding in my ears and my balls. My mind raced through possible, ridiculous explanations if she opened my door, even though I realized it was more likely she would knock first, having no reason to believe that I was committing a felony in here. If she knocked, I'd have the excuse to pull out and maybe I could get Astrid to hide. Or Mom might not come near my room at all. Until I knew what was going to happen, though, I was frozen in place, in mid-fuck. I would have thought fear, the sure knowledge of such clear and present danger of being caught would have made me shrivel up, but instead I stayed rock hard, and with the sensation of dribbling an infinite stream into the womb of a thirteen-year-old.

I may have been keeping as still as possible, but it takes two to tango, and soon Astrid must have grown impatient with the lack of motion. Her upper body remained mostly still as well, but her thighs twitched, pussy seemed to contract. Maybe it wasn't even conscious, and just like an automated door, detecting no movement, trying to close, with no awareness that there was an obstruction in the way. But a part of me felt it was more than that, like she was trying to tell me to finish the job, that it didn't matter that I was about to get caught... if I was, wouldn't it be better to be caught finishing inside her?

That thought combined with the stimulation caused the inevitable chain reaction, the pressure in my balls that put lie to that phantom feeling that I was already dribbling inside of her, because the real thing was unmistakable. I pulled out a fraction of an inch and pushed back in one slightly bigger fraction, and then I really was spurting inside of her, burst after burst of cum that was dangerous but no longer of concern to me. All I could focus on, other than the rush of pleasure, was the certainty that I couldn't make any noise.

Once I could think clearly again, it became clear to me that my mother wasn't coming... or, at least, that she didn't climb the stairs because she came to check on me, or she heard some suspicious noise. If that was the case, she would have arrived already, caught me in the act or interrupted with a knock. I couldn't tell exactly what was happening elsewhere on the second floor, but she had probably gone into her bedroom. I let out a deep breath, feeling more confident that, if I was careful, once my dick had mostly softened, I could pull away from Astrid in a series of short, quiet moves that wouldn't be suspicious.

At least, I could have if she cooperated. Instead, she licked my palm, which was still covering her face. I hesitated for a second and a half, worried that, in this worst possible of times, she'd choose to make a noise, but then I worried more that maybe she was having trouble breathing or something and I hurriedly let go. She did take a breath, but then she backed up, supporting herself on one bent arm and whipped the other around to reach around my neck, and pulled herself up to me. She planted a soft kiss on the corner of my lip. "Kiss me," she said softly.


"Just kiss me." We were already making too much noise for my comfort, just in the slight adjustment of our positions, so I shushed her. "Kiss me and I'll be quiet."

So I did, knowing it was a bad move, but doing it anyway, I locked my lips to hers and kissed her, sinking down into the bed together in an embrace almost passionate as our tongues met, and, it felt, inspiring one more spurt of ejaculate from a penis that I'd thought had already given its all. Somehow, making out with a thirteen-year-old in my bed still counted as an alluring taboo even after fucking her.

I gave her a good thirty-second kiss, and then she pulled away, satisfied. I took the opportunity to roll over onto my back and away for her, even though my cock was still dribbling. I pulled the boxers and pants up, desperate to return to the appearance of normalcy even if it left a cum stains on my clothing, when I heard Astrid's voice again. "Sorry," she whispered, although seemingly more relaxed. "It's just... what would it mean if my first time didn't include a first kiss?" I supposed on some level I could understand that, but I didn't answer. "I know it doesn't meant we're dating or anything."

A part of me wanted to scream in frustration. What was with her? She could keep silent losing her virginity but after, when it was she couldn't stop talking and just go to sleep. I let out another soft 'shhh' noise so that she would get the hint. "Just try to sleep."

She went silent then, and I tried to follow my own advice, but it was impossible... at least, for a few minutes. I usually got drowsy after cumming, but my constant worry about what my mom was doing kept me alert and starting to regret what had just happened. It was stupid, it was immoral, it was way more exciting than it should have been but that only made the comedown worse. For all the justifications and rationalizations, it reflected badly on me that I'd done what I'd done... but there was no changing the past. I was now the kind of person who would do that, the kind the whole world would consider a heartless monster.

Of course, I knew that wasn't completely true. If I didn't have a heart, what was beating so dramatically? What was it that was worried, even more than for my own safety and freedom, that I might have somehow hurt Astrid, or that, if this got out, if would hurt my mom? What wanted me to roll over towards this beautiful girl and cuddle next to her, whispering devotion in her ear and give her the kind of kiss she deserved? I may have been a monster, but I had a heart. It was my brain that was occasionally defective.

While pondering this, I finally heard a reassuringly familiar noise... the sound of my mother closing the door to her bedroom. The danger wasn't completely over, but she was less likely to hear anything going on in my room when she was locked in hers. I let out another deep breath and felt sleep overtake me.


The Halloween Hitch, Chapter Twenty-Five AnonyMPC 16/10/18(Tue)20:57 No. 24754 ID: a609fb

Chapter Twenty-Five:

Waking up was like a soft kick in the balls. Literally so, in fact. I was on my side, facing Astrid, and she was facing away, and one of her feet had curled up and banged into my crotch. It wasn't hard enough to be painful, but it was alarming, and it woke me with a start. The contact, or maybe my sudden movement when I felt it, must have woken Astrid too, because she mumbled "Sorry."

"It's okay," I reassured her, and I may have drifted off again, because the next thing I remember, she was softly pushing against my shoulder. "What?"

"You're poking me."

"What?" No, she was poking me, wasn't she?

"You're hard again. We should do it again." I honestly can't be sure if I really was hard when she said it, or if I became hard because she made that suggestion, but I was sure that she was right, I was rock hard. And out of my pants. Hadn't I pulled my pants back up and over after we'd parted? Yes, I was sure of it. So did that I'd done it myself, my subconscious desiring a reprise? Or could it be that Astrid was playing with me in my sleep?

Now I was even harder, at that thought. I felt her shuffle backwards, towards me, and soon after I felt her smooth skin against my cock, her ass or some portion of her leg, warm and electrifying, removing the likelihood of falling back asleep. Seconds later, I felt a slick kiss on the shaft as I definitively made contact with her pussy from behind.

Fuck, I'd already sinned once, would one more be so bad? Morally, no, at that point it didn't seem to be a problem for me. Even though I knew in the harsh light of day I'd feel guilty, right now, the only concern would be the noise, and Astrid made that easy for me too. She lifted herself and reached over for my hand, which had been weakly pinned when she pushed against me, pulled it outward and settled herself against it, so that her head was lying near my shoulder, and then, moved the palm itself so it was firmly over her mouth. I had a feeling, a worry, that I was somehow defining what hot sex was to her... slow, quiet fucks in the dark with a hand over your mouth. It was darker than I would have chosen for her, but it was all I had to offer right now. Maybe next time, some part of me whispered, the same part that pushed my hips forward in search of that wet place.

I found it easily enough, but I had to use my other hand to help direct it, to work the head in at first. Once that was done, I wrapped that arm over her stomach and grabbed her on the side that was against the bed, and pulled the bottom part of her in to me, feeling the warmth of her surround me once again. It was easier this time, and maybe the position helped. Even Astrid helped, more than putting everything in place, she pushed back into me more vigorously, and I felt that last deprived inch that hadn't been satisfied last time sink into her. She stiffened and made a sound into my hand when that happened, but I felt no tongue and so assumed no complaint, as long as I wasn't in there long and got there slowly.

Again and again I rocked into her, withdrew, returned, still conscious of the noise and any sign of her discomfort, but I felt none. And since she was doing half the work pushing into me by now, I held her more loosely and the hand not guarding her from making noise began to wander, explore her flesh. It slid beneath the tie and still-open shirt and closed against one of her breast buds, a small swell of softness against the hardness of her breastbone. It reminded me a little of the soft, moldable handle of the umbrella I had the day we met, something I also couldn't stop squeezing when I got my hand on it... but this was topped with a hard point that felt wonderful against my fingers, and a little more wonderful squeezed between two. She made a sound when I did that, one I assumed was pleasure because she hadn't tried to open her mouth, and I sensed her hand navigating around mine to reach between her own legs.

This time, there wasn't as much of a sense of urgency... I was still worried about all the things I should have been worried about, but I had just cum only hours ago (if that), so the sex wasn't an intense rush to get off that had to be done frustratingly slowly, it was a guilty pleasure I could enjoy leisurely at the pace available. I even had time to realize that I'd finally broken the Curse of the No Halloween Nookie, which caused me to savor the visual from outside. Remove the covers, add some lights, and what we were doing would look like some evil pirate raping... or, at least, ravishing a young wizard girl from Hogwarts.

I didn't like that image... or at least, not all of me did. There was a part that did, but I didn't want to be that part, so I tried to convince myself that my embrace wasn't to silence her or force her, but rather to protect her. A pirate embracing a Hogwarts kid and making sure she felt safe and loved, that seemed at least a little better, and to that end, I found myself kissing her head through her hair, as though reassuring her that everything would be all right.

Astrid seemed to squeeze on my cock with that, like it was something she really liked, which made me worry about the action, that it might be taken the wrong way, as a romantic gesture. And I did feel romantic towards her... even while I told myself I couldn't go down that path, a part of me realized the song now playing softly over the speakers was Lorde's "Royals," and I spent the next few thrusts wondering if she would think that was our song. Sure, it wasn't the first song we fucked to, but it was the first one we realized we both liked on the day we first met. And in some ways the second fuck is the one that matters... once is easy to write off as a mistake, twice usually means something. Maybe that was why she'd woke me up to offer it, so maybe this song would be appropriate.

Despite the song, I wasn't exactly treating her like a ruler in this situation, still covering her mouth, making much of the motion, squeezing her developing breast like I had every right to it... but that didn't seem to be a problem to her either. I could feel it in her, she was having another orgasm, trembling in my arms, the wind from her nose, her head suddenly rolling back towards me. And as good as the sex felt, that feeling topped it, knowing I'd made her cum before me, twice, now. In all my other experiences, I'd always cum first, unless I'd done a lot of foreplay devoted to the girl's pleasure at the expense of my own... and sometimes not even then. I'm no sex god... but being with Astrid made me feel like one. And riding the high of that feeling, my dick started to get the ultra stiff feeling, my balls kicked into gear again, and I knew I was going to have to decide where to cum.

I pulled most of the way out... then slammed back in, then halfway out, and with a final thought of "fuck it" (for I had already shot off inside her once, and doing so a second time seemed less risky and messy than pulling out and doing it on the bed), I went all the way in again, as far as I could. I exploded inside her, and this time with no worry of somebody walking in on us. I still had the residual worry and guilt over what I was doing and who I was doing it with, but that was low enough to be washed away in a moment of pure pleasure.

As my ejaculations were winding down, I let my hand fall off Astrid's mouth and she took a deep breath in and out, synching with my own exhalations. This time there was no demand to kiss, but I kissed the back of her head again anyway, on impulse.

We didn't speak, just lay and breathed together, and I didn't let her go. I wanted to stay holding her a little while... it felt good, felt right, and felt like too much of an effort to turn away again while my thoughts were starting to feel fuzzy and quiet. I fell asleep like that.

I woke up like that, too, with her still snuggled up against me, not awaking because of a movement but because of words, words she was saying so quietly even I could barely hear them, and only then because the music had quieted between songs. "... You become responsible, forever, for what you have tamed. You are responsible..." and then the music started again, and the next quiet moment, Astrid, too seemed asleep. I wondered about her words for a moment, then begun to wonder if I was merely dreaming, and pretty soon, I was.


The Halloween Hitch, Chapter Twenty-Six AnonyMPC 16/10/19(Wed)03:24 No. 24755 ID: a609fb

Chapter Twenty-Six:

The next thing I remember, I was again being woken up. "Sorry, sorry," Astrid whispered, after her pokes on my chest (through the open neck of my pirate shirt) caused me to jerk awake. I twisted my head from side to side, surprised by something being different but taking a few seconds to realize that it was how bright the room was. The sun had risen, and although it wasn't blasting directly through the window, there was enough indirect light that I could see everything more clearly. Astrid's tousled hair, her worried expression, her still-open shirt and, breasts and, yes, those familiar nipples that had started this whole mess, looking like doe-eyes making an innocent expression like, "Who me?". I checked the time on the clock by my bed. Just a little after 7:30. No... I hadn't set that clock back, and it didn't do it automatically like any modern device with a clock in it should... really it was 6:30.

Still, shit, she'd stayed the whole night. If Mom had already woken up, I was screwed... but no, after my heart had already gone into overdrive, my brain started working, telling me that it was unlikely, after a night like that, that she'd be up at the crack of dawn. We probably had a few more hours. I relaxed, looking down at her underdressed torso again. Maybe even enough time to... no, why tempt fate? "We've got to get out of here," I said, and launched myself out of bed.

"Okay." Astrid also got out of bed, more slowly, and then added, "Except... I've really gotta pee. That's why I woke you."

I facepalmed myself out of instinct, but it wasn't so bad... at least, not much more dangerous than moving her downstairs in the first place. "Okay, just... get dressed, we'll do it on the way, okay?" She nodded, and began buttoning up her shirt. I watched for a moment, then looked away.

Down at myself was where I looked, really, as I realized that I was still dressed like a pirate, puffy pants, frilly white silk shirt. If I was going to drive her home... I couldn't do anything about her clothes, but I certainly did not want to look like I was doing the walk of shame with her. It would raise questions.

I pulled off my shirt and went to my dresser to pull the first clean shirt out, which was grey, safe, conservative, not looking like a child molester at all, which seemed like top priorities. I looked back at Astrid, who was looking at me with a slight smile on her face and I felt momentarily embarrassed, more at the fact that she'd seen me than that she was currently pulling her red-and-gold panties back up her legs to cover the hole I'd recently dumped two loads into. It was possible my cum was leaking into those panties now... okay, by this point I was embarrassed by the fact that I was thinking that and I had an erection, and I needed to change into less ridiculous-looking pants, and she was still staring at me.

Speaking of loads of cum, my boxers did have that smell that they'd just absorbed some of the sexual juices. Maybe I couldn't do anything about Astrid, since going without panties seemed to be even worse if we happened to be caught (and I didn't see any obvious stains on her), but at least I could look and smell less like I'd had sex, with a complete clothing change... so I grabbed a fresh pair of underwear, and my jeans from yesterday off the floor, told Astrid, "Don't look," then turned, shimmied out of the pirate pants and boxers and quickly into the new stuff. I looked back at Astrid. She'd watched the whole thing, and gave me a devilish smile and a shrug, like, "What did you expect?" I brushed it off. It wasn't like she'd seen me completely full frontal, and it wasn't like even that was anything worse than what we'd already done, so I knew I really was being ridiculous.

Now she looked presentable, I looked presentable, all that was left was to make our escape to a place where us being together didn't scream "felony in progress." And that meant getting past my mom, and doing a quick bathroom stop. Even if the risk was low, it was still the most dangerous part of the plan, and I wanted to take it safely. I instructed her quietly, "Okay, get your shoes, purse, everything you need to go, and get it ready. When I come back and wave, you follow, okay?" She nodded, and started looking for her shoes. "Shoes off till we get downstairs." Another nod of confirmation. It was some relief that she at least knew how to be quiet... even without my hand over her mouth, me thrusting deep inside her...

No, think about that later! Right then, I needed to focus.

I cracked the door to my room an inch, praying that I wouldn't see my mother's disappointed face waiting on the other side. Luckily, no, it was just an empty hallway. I slid through the narrowest possible opening in the door, and crept down the hallway on the balls of my feet. First I peered over the railing by the stairs, trying to see if I could find any sign of life from below. But there was nothing. I continued down the hallway to the door of my mother's room, knowing even that was a risk, but... I had to know.

She had her own music on, old stuff from the nineties mostly, and much softer, and above the melody I heard the sporadic sound of something like one of those sidewalk cleaning machines with the big hose, sucking up dust, a sound which was disturbingly phlegmy but right then came as a relief. Mom snored, and if she snored, she was asleep, which was good for me. I realized then that I hadn't even considered if Astrid might snore when I let her sleep beside me, and that if she had, it might have blown everything. But it hadn't... if there was a God, it seemed like He was, improbably, on my side.

I cautiously returned to my room, and found Astrid waiting by the door, shoes on top of her purse and held in her hand. I waved her forward, and we went for the stairs, slowly... as we passed the bathroom, I shook my head and pointed downstairs, indicating we'd use the one downstairs, it was just slightly safer.

We made it down, we made it to the bathroom, and I let her go inside while I first grabbed the car keys and then waited by the stairs, listening for any noise that might signal my doom. My luck continued to hold, though my bladder started to complain that it needed to use the bathroom too. No matter, I could hold it... this stealthy escape that was, so far, going smoothly could be thwarted at any moment and I wasn't going to risk another thirty seconds if I didn't have to.

It felt more like a minute with Astrid's washroom break, and her washing her hands, but finally the door opened, and I led her through the door to the garage. Once inside we stopped for just a second to let her put her shoes on, and I opened the car, shut the door, locked it for a placebo feeling of additional safety. We looked at each other, and I exhaled deeply, and she just laughed, then, finally speaking in a normal tone of voice, said, "Well, we made it."

"Yeah," I said. "That was..." I couldn't find the words, so I just shook my head, started the car, and activated the garage door opener. "Umm, could you bend down and hide a little? Just in case somebody's outside looking?" She shook her head, a smile on her face, and I thought maybe she was refusing, but she did, folding herself over. The garage opened, I pulled out, hyper-aware of any observers, but it was quiet, virtually dead, as you might expect for early Sunday morning. The road looked damp, like it'd been raining overnight, and maybe that kept people out too. I drove to the end of the street and, still seeing nobody, said, "Okay, it's probably safe now."


The Halloween Hitch, Chapter Twenty-Seven AnonyMPC 16/10/19(Wed)06:16 No. 24756 ID: a609fb

Chapter Twenty-Seven:

It was a good thing nobody was around to see, or it might look like Astrid was giving me road head or something when she returned to a normal upright seated position, popping out of nowhere. Her hair had fallen over her face, and she brushed it back as she looked back at me. "See?" she said finally, after a few silent moments. I met her eye. "I told you I wouldn't be any trouble." Making herself completely at home, she leaned forward to turn on the radio, like our interaction being without pop music seemed unnatural.

"Yeah, well... I'd hardly call that no trouble," I said.

She shrugged and raised an eyebrow at me, leaning towards me ever-so-slightly. "Well, did I at least make up for the trouble?" Her hand edged across the divider, like she was going to reach across and onto my crotch, and attempt to 'make up' for the trouble one more time.

It didn't cross over to my side completely, but it lay there like she might continue the move at any moment. I had to shut the idea down. "Look, Astrid... about... what happened, last night."

She turned her body towards me, a smile on her face, a sense of swagger in her posture. "You mean when we had sex?" In contrast to her self-confident appearance, her voice dropped to a near whisper for those last two words, even though there was now no possibility of anybody hearing us. But because of that it reminded me even more of her innocence, the innocence I'd violated. She was a girl who couldn't talk about sex without lowering her voice. Isn't that a clearer signal than anything that she's too young to be having it?

"It was a mistake, we shouldn't have done that."

The hand pulled back into her lap. She rolled her eyes and looked back out the window of her side. "I wanted you to."

"It's no excuse. I'm supposed to be the responsible one here."

"Well, I don't care. I loved it." Now she looked back and the smile returned, like it had been beaten but not broken. "Don't worry, I promise I'm not going to tell anybody if that's what you're worried about."

It was, but it wasn't all I was worried about. And worried more that if I offended her, that promise might melt away like my own resolve when she offered herself. Still, I couldn't leave her with misconceptions. "Regardless, it... well, what happened between us, us... sleeping together." Christ, maybe I'm too innocent to be having sex. "It... it doesn't mean..." Her smile faded, jaw set, expression closed off. I waited for the demand, the instant reversal, that unless I agreed to be her boyfriend, to have sex with her on her terms, that she really would tell everyone what happened.

It didn't come. She didn't seem angry... maybe a little sad, but not dramatically so. "I know. This isn't some romantic story. This was just... a special occasion." I couldn't tell you whether I was relieved or disappointed. Probably a little of both. "But we are still friends, right?"

I let out a breath. It was a relief, at the very least, that she took it so well. "Right. Friends." And that made me want to please her, and seeing a fast food sign up ahead, I asked, "Are you hungry?"

"Maybe a little, yeah."

"I'll buy you something. What do you want?"

"I don't know." We passed the sign I saw, but there were always more places, so I let her think while I drover farther and farther away. I didn't even know where I was going, exactly. Finally, she pointed up a sign to a coffee shop. "Maybe a muffin?"

I pulled into a drive-thru of the next donut shop I found, which was almost empty, and we placed our orders. I was a little worried, but there was nothing inherently wrong with someone my age and a young girl in a car together. As far as anyone else knew, she could be my cousin that I was taking to Sunday school. But nobody challenged us, or even seemed to pay us any attention... server at the pickup window seemed half-asleep herself.

Astrid decided on a pumpkin-spice muffin and I got her some orange juice to wash it down. I got a coffee for myself. We parked in the corner of the parking lot to enjoy it, or at least so I could enjoy mine, without risking both of our lives. As soon as we came to a stop, Astrid tore the top half off the muffin and presented the other half in my direction. "You want a taste of my muffin?"

Her streak of making me think of double entendres continued. I'd hoped actually sampling her muffin might have cured that, but no such luck. "No thanks," I said and took my first sip of blessed caffeine which started to clear out the cobwebs in my skull, though I knew my bladder would be a problem soon.

"You sure? A good breakfast is important." I shook my head, enjoying my own liquid breakfast. She shrugged like it was no big deal, and bit into the top piece. The orange juice was held upright between her legs. "Thanks for buying me this."

"It's nothing." It was the least I could do. Almost literally. The girl gave me her virginity and I repaid her with a breakfast combo. Besides, she was right, a good breakfast was important. At least providing that's some small step towards behaving responsibly again...

Responsible. The word triggered a memory, back to last night, after the second time. What was she talking about? I wasn't sure if I should ask, and I put it off for a while, but it nagged at me. I let her finish eating, and drink about half of the orange juice, while I finished my coffee. In the meantime, we listened to music, and sometimes she bounced and wiggled her hips in her seat along to the tune. "So," I said, when she was done eating. "Can I take you home, now?"

"I guess." Her voice was apathetic, but her shoulders slumped when she heard the question, making it clear that she still didn't seem too happy at the prospect. "Yeah, I mean... it's not like you can spend the whole day with me, right? I've already imposed on you enough."

Imposed. As accurate as it was, it seemed unnecessarily harsh. "I mean, if you've got somewhere else you'd rather go... as long as it's safe. The library, or something?"

She spoke automatically. "Library doesn't open until noon on Sundays."

"Right. Home, then? I mean... it's going to be alright for you there?"

"No... I mean, yes, I'm sure it's fine."

She didn't seem tremendously bothered, just disappointed, like what she really wanted was to hang out. As much as I wanted that too, it wasn't going to happen. We'd already spent far too much time together, and it was time to bring it to an end. I had to go home and do what I could to erase any sign that she'd ever been there, just for my own sanity. Luckily, she ate relatively cleanly, catching many of her crumbs in a napkin and wadding it up along with the muffin liner when she was done, but even so I knew I'd sweep them out of Mom's car just so she would have no reason to ask, and I would have no need to lie. But that was a task for later. So, I started the engine and pulled out, then headed towards where I remembered Astrid lived.

As we got closer, I realized that this was probably going to be my last chance to satisfy my curiosity. "Listen can I ask you something?"

"I think we're past the point in our relationship where you have to ask permission to ask me questions."

"Right. It's just..." Now I wasn't even sure if I wanted to bring it up. "Last night... I thought I heard you... whispering something. Something about... responsibility? And... taming?"

"Oh." She looked down, like there was an answer in the orange juice bottle still between her thighs. "It was just... a quote."

I remembered, she'd used it earlier in the night, and jokingly said she'd tamed me. But a joke and a whispered mantra to herself were two different things, and I felt an uneasy feeling in my stomach. "That was from The Little Prince, right?"

She nodded, brightening. "The Prince meets a fox, and the fox says he cannot play, because he's not tamed. And the Prince asks what that means, tame. "'It is an act too often neglected,' the fox says. 'It means to establish ties.'"

"Establish ties," I repeated.

"'Just that,' said the fox. 'To me, you are still nothing more than a boy who is just like a hundred thousand boys. And I have no need of you. And you, on your part, have no need of me. To you, I am nothing more than a fox like a hundred other foxes." She spoke now with a certain rhythm, and I knew she was reciting it word for word, or nearly so, from something she's read many times. Which was impressive... for all I've read, I might, at best, be able to quote a sentence or two of one of my favorites without looking it up. "But if you tame me, then we shall need each other. To me, you will be unique in all the world. To you, I shall be unique in all the world..."

People don't often drop long quotes out of nowhere, so it was only natural that I began searching for a deeper meaning behind it. Was last night, offering herself, a way to establish ties with me? To make sure that we couldn't forget each other, that she'd always be important to me. If so, I suppose it worked. She'd always be this astounding lapse in judgment that I had to remember, to avoid in the future. And I'd always be her first time. Maybe more. Maybe even her first kiss. But she also said "we shall need each other." And as much as part of me wanted it, as much as part of me felt the same way, I couldn't have her developing romantic feelings for me. "Astrid."

"Don't," she said, taking a ragged breath. "Just, don't say it. I know. I know, okay? I'm not as immature as you think. We're not together. That's not what I meant. I didn't even mean anything at all. I just whispered it because I do that sometimes, recite my favorite passages... it helps me sleep. It wasn't easy with you leaving the music on. Also, you snore."

"I do not."

"You do so. Not much, but enough to keep me awake. I mean, I suppose I could get used to it. If I had to. But I don't. The story's not even about romance, anyway. It's about friendship. That's all I meant. We've established ties."

"Okay," I said, though it still seemed that she meant more than that. But it was too uncomfortable to press on that wound. "So, did I tame you or did you tame me?"

"I don't know. Maybe we tamed each other? It doesn't matter. As long as we're friends. We are, right?"


She twisted her body and leaned over the divider some, smiling solicitously. "Friends with benefits."


"Kidding!" Her hands flew up defensively, like I might playfully punch her shoulder in response, then dropped again. "Well, not kidding, exactly. I mean, I'm up for it if you ever wanna..." This time, she wasn't looking at me except out of the corner of her eye. Like when it was a joke, she could be forward about it, but when there was a grain of truth, a real offer, she turned back into a shy little girl, at least in body language.

I tried to ignore it. The last thing I needed while I was still coming to terms with my sin was an open offer to sin again. I knew I must be strong, even as my dick began to shift and wake up at that very interesting offer. "Let's just stick to friendship... no benefits." Even friendship was a danger, realistically... but it was a danger I was becoming resigned to, somehow.

"Your loss," she said, again acting like it was just a casual offer between friends. She slapped the cap of the plastic bottle between her thighs repeatedly with alternating hands, like it was a tiny tiny drum. Each hit must have been a tiny vibration on her crotch, and that thought got me wondering. I'd said no to making it an ongoing thing, but what if she got wet and horny again, and she offered one last fling?

It was ridiculous, but I figured I'd better get out of that situation before it developed, considering how weak-willed I'd turned out to be. I sped up, ever-so-slightly, then got ready to turn on a side street that led more directly towards where she lived. I got to the intersection right as the light turned red, but couldn't turn immediately because there was an old lady crossing the street. "Hey, remember when I said if you took me home I'd ditch you at the first red light?"


She undid her seatbelt and reached for the door lock before I could react.


Anonymous 16/10/19(Wed)14:19 No. 24757 ID: 3ae92c

You are a such a good writer, it was an absolute pleasure to read this i love this story and the characters and i thank you very much for sharing it with me and others. The part in the end with The little prince was amazing. Although it seems like an end, i reallly hope it isnt. It would be a good end but an depressing one. thank you for writing

The Halloween Hitch, Chapter Twenty-Eight AnonyMPC 16/10/19(Wed)16:00 No. 24758 ID: a609fb

Chapter Twenty-Eight:

Before I knew it, Astrid was outside the car, but leaning in through the partly opened door. She held her orange juice bottle and the wadded up napkin in her hand. "Thanks for the ride... and... well, for everything. Goodbye!" She gave me a little wave, like this was a done deal.

I realized that it was. Trying to keep her from leaving or chase after her would get the police called on me by the old lady who wasn't paying anything but the most cursory attention right now, but easily could if I acted out of place. Even trying too hard to convince Astrid to let me drive her the rest of the way might look weird. All I could do is play along.

"Uh, okay, I guess," I said. "Have a good day." She closed the door, backed up onto the sidewalk, and waved again. I turned, because I'd already signaled, and as I left I watched her in the mirror. She seemed to hold my gaze, smiling, maybe a little sadly, but it was hard to tell.

A part of me missed her, even already, and even though I was just trying to get her home as quickly as possible. But it was also like a huge knot in the core of my body had loosened, I was relieved that this frustrating but delightful girl was no longer immediately risking my freedom and morality, and finally having that peace of mind felt good, even as losing her seemed to leave a void I craved to fill. One more emotional cocktail for the road as I watched her slowly dwindling form.

Soon I couldn't keep her in sight anymore without doing something suspicious, so I drove to a coffee shop and this time went inside, first to use the restroom and then for another coffee, which I nursed for about a half an hour before returning home, making one stop at the corner store to buy some milk, which gave me an excuse for running out so early.

Not that I needed one. Mom was still asleep when I got home, and I knew she might be until sometime in the early afternoon. I swept any remaining crumbs from the passenger seat, did a few dishes, made myself a quick lunch, and went upstairs, all the while my thoughts turned back to Astrid, what we'd done, and especially the story she quoted right before she left.

Maybe, I realized, I could get some insight, see exactly where her head was at, if I read it for myself. It might help to figure out if I was going to have an obsessed murderous teen stalker on my hands or just a girl with weird ideas about friendship.

So I fired up Google, searched for "If you tame me" and "Little Prince", and got an online text of the novel. Actually, I jumped just to Chapter 21, which was the source of that particular quote. I thought that, perhaps, I would one day read the rest, but it didn't seem so important right then, and the book seemed like a collection of loosely linked but independent stories.

Chapter 21 wasn't a story that seemed like a parable for great romance, like I thought at first. It seemed wistful, all in all, like it was about two people seeking connection, just to add something new and different and wonderful to their lives and the taming was a ritual to accomplish that. If that was why Astrid had sex with me... well, it seemed like someone who genuinely did just want a friend, and went about perhaps the worst way to do it.

But then I read on, and, to my surprise, the fox and the boy don't spend very much time together... literally the next sentence after he has tamed the fox, it begins, "And when the hour of his departure drew near--." The fox is sad, and even though he wouldn't have hurt so much without being tamed, he is thankful for it anyway. After a few more words of wisdom, they part ways, and, although I didn't read the rest, I looked it up, the fox doesn't appear anywhere else in the book.

I was already looking for parallels, for signs in the story that might foretell how Astrid saw the future of our relationship, and so my heart ached, faintly but noticeably, as I wondered... perhaps Astrid really meant this to be goodbye. Maybe she recognized that we lived in two different worlds and she only wanted one night, to be important to me, to build a memory for herself that she could hold through all her quiet times, of being appreciated, desired, connected. Maybe she was the kind of Manic Pixie Dream Girl who dances out of your life forever at the end of the movie.

Logically speaking, that was the best outcome for me, to never see each other again... unless, perhaps, if she one day came to believe she'd been abused and we'd meet again with the full force of the legal system behind her, but that was a possible future I now had to live with no matter what. At least I couldn't get myself in any more trouble.

It should have made me happy. Instead, I yearned for another chance to talk to her, to be more for her than that. Not for the sex, so much, but as a real friend, to talk about books, or video games, or ridiculous hypothetical scenarios, to be a shoulder to cry on, to give her hugs and maybe build up her self-esteem, and, selfishly, to be a person that somebody else wanted to have around, to build up my own.

It's always when you've lost something, or when you think you have, that you appreciate it most, I guess. I spent the next few hours in a mild funk over the possibility that I was becoming more and more sure was the case.

Then she contacted me on Steam.


The Halloween Hitch, Chapter Twenty-Nine (FINAL) AnonyMPC 16/10/19(Wed)18:00 No. 24759 ID: a609fb

Chapter Twenty-Nine:

I'd forgotten, for the time being, that she'd done that, made us friends, in a digital, potentially traceable, way. That worry still echoed in some part of my mind, but now it was like a lifeline when I saw her message pop up and read the contents: "Hi, sorry I had to leave like that. It was just too early to go home yet, and I didn't want you to feel obligated to spend even more time with me." She actually typed it like that, not in the shorthand, no capitalization, grammar-free way of most text interactions, a hallmark of a heavy reader. Actually, she skipped the period, which I remembered because some part of me later made a panicked prayer that it wasn't some kind of omen for the future. Mostly she used line-breaks instead.

After a time that I hoped would look like I didn't just read her message the moment it arrived, I typed back, "Where'd you go?"

"There's a park near my school. A little kids playground. So I just waited there. And read. Sorry, by the way."

"It's okay." I wasn't sure what she was sorry for... since she had already apologized for leaving so suddenly, it had to be something else, didn't it? But as curious as I was, I didn't want her to elaborate when this chat transcript could conceivably be used one day in my criminal trial.

A few seconds later, a new message arrived. "I'll get it back to you next time we see each other."

That gave me pause. Huh? Curiosity outweighed caution. "What?"

"Your book. Wool. It seemed interesting so... I borrowed it. Without asking." Smiley face. "You said you were finished, right?"

I looked over where I'd left the book, but of course, it wasn't there. It's weird the things you don't notice, even when you've spent a borderline obsessive amount of time making sure a place looked exactly the same as it did 24 hours ago. "Yeah. It's okay, you can keep it."

"No, no, I'll give it back. Next time we see each other." I wondered if maybe that was the whole reason she took it, as an excuse to see me again. Was she that manipulative? "I'm about halfway. It's pretty cool so far... even though my favorite character's gone now."

"Yeah," I typed. "They do pull the rug out from under you a few times."

"Anyway, I won't bug you, and I've got some homework to do. I just wanted to let you know I got home okay. In case you worried."

"Thanks," I typed, not willing to clarify whether I was thanking her for not bugging me or for letting me know she got home. The truth was, I was thankful for both.

"K... I'll talk to you later then." And, just when I was about to type "Bye," I saw the notification that there was more to come from her, and one last message, "I'm so glad we're friends now."

Before I could reply, she logged off. I could of course still have replied, left a message for her to read when she got back, but... when she wasn't there, there wasn't as much pressure to reply. And again, I wondered, if that was planned, to let me off the hook, for having to say it back... or to let her off the hook, in case I wasn't going to. At the very least, it left me free to not worry about which path I was going to take.

It was true that, when I thought that Astrid might have the romantic idea that we should never see each other again, I was sad. But the revelation that this wasn't the case didn't make me feel much better.

I guess you just can't win. My interactions with her were still serving up mixed emotional cocktails. Now in addition to that, I also had to walk a tightrope, trying to keep a girl I genuinely liked at a distance for fear that she'd grow too attached, and worrying that if I pushed her away too harshly she might retaliate.

Maybe it wouldn't be so hard, if I could keep it to just being friends. Of course, everyone knows, it's hard to be just friends with somebody you've had sex with, but I didn't see any way around it. And while I tried to put a friendship with benefits off the table, a friendship with a Hitch seemed was a risk I was going to have to take.

The End

Anonymous 16/10/19(Wed)18:38 No. 24760 ID: e8aab2

Jeeeeeesus. Is that the end-end? Because you're really tugging on my feels here.

Anonymous 16/10/19(Wed)18:41 No. 24761 ID: cc451c

Last sentence doesn't make grammatical sense.

Nice story overall - bit of a sad ending, but a real one. Looking forward to more of your work.

AnonyMPC 16/10/19(Wed)18:50 No. 24762 ID: a609fb


Thanks, sometimes when I edit too fast I leave fragments of the old wording and forget to clean properly. Removed the first And, and replaced "seemed was" with "seemed like."


It's the end for now. I do have ideas for another installment, but I've grown cautious of promising what I'm not sure will ever materialize. All depends on where my writing mood takes me.

Anonymous 16/10/20(Thu)00:07 No. 24763 ID: 55af64

Nice read with a great publishing speed.
I'd read this even without the sex but there'd be quite a major plotpoint missing and the story wouldn't feel as rounded as it does.

Anonymous 16/10/20(Thu)00:58 No. 24764 ID: a73a21

I don't think I've ever read a story from you with such an depressing ending.

Overall, I loved the story, could find barely any flaws whatsoever.

Any idea what works we should expect next from you?

Anonymous 16/10/20(Thu)10:33 No. 24765 ID: 7f05fa

This was quite simply one of the best things I've read. And I don't just mean erotic literature, but of all books. You developed the characters well and made me grow to love both of them. Even though I think Karl is being a little ridiculous about the not spending any time with her at all and worrying too much, I loved them both.

Now I need to know what happens next! I hate sad endings and I hate not knowing. If you don't write any more on these characters I'm just going to have to make up an ending in my own mind, and how after a few more meetings like this Karl decides he really does love her and they get married when she is of age 5 years later.

Thank you so much for writing these excellent and hot stories for us all!

AnonyMPC 16/10/26(Wed)20:15 No. 24784 ID: a609fb

Thanks to all those who gave praise, even if I don't individually single out your post numbers, I do appreciate it.

>I don't think I've ever read a story from you with such an depressing ending.

Really? I thought it was relatively hopeful. I mean, yeah, he has mixed feelings but he is willing to continue a friendship at least. I've written much darker stuff.

>Any idea what works we should expect next from you?

Sorry, nothing's particularly close. These days, when I start writing, I tackle any story that I feel drawn to. Sometimes that means I do a different one every day, and sometimes I'm writing several stories with similar themes. I mean, while I was writing this I was also writing two arguably three other stories which could be described as "a somewhat lonely young girl takes an abnormal interest in an older guy and leads him to doing things he wouldn't ordinarily do" just because I was in the mood to write that theme but any particular story I was stalled on. This just happened to be the one that caught fire the fastest... I might even get the others done eventually (as they've all got somewhat different dynamics and gimmicks... one's an outright loli-dom story where a rich girl finds a statuatory-rapist-who-broke-the-terms-of-his-parole hiding out on her property and captures him for her own interest, another's centered around a theme park). I've also got of course various sequels like the next iCity story and Magic Marker I want to get back to, maybe a sequel to Molestr too. Among other stand-alones, there's something half-done that I kind of want to finish in the hopes that it'll start a subgenre... not that I'd write anymore in the series but a framework that others could.

But unfortunately I have more ideas than I have time and energy.

Honestly, if anything, I'd probably put my money on a Phil Phantom tribute as the next completed thing, just because when I DO feel like writing those, they go pretty quickly.


>Now I need to know what happens next! I hate sad endings and I hate not knowing. If you don't write any more on these characters I'm just going to have to make up an ending in my own mind, and how after a few more meetings like this Karl decides he really does love her and they get married when she is of age 5 years later.

Making your own headcanon is a perfectly valid approach in my book, I do it myself. Again, I don't promise anything, but I do have some ideas for where the next part would go (in addition to some of the fun you can do with phones, some of it would take place in Astrid's favorite library) and where it'd end, and some themes it might dance around. But not enough to commit to saying I'm working on it.

Anonymous 16/10/27(Thu)02:22 No. 24785 ID: 738f66

Fair play, I eagerly await anything that comes from you (except magic marker, don't like that story at all for a number of reasons).

How do you feel of MCP nowadays? Have you lost a lot of interest in writing it, or are things just slow going with other new exciting ideas?

Rachael Avarie!!IuBGZ0LmOz 16/11/01(Tue)19:10 No. 24791 ID: 87dad6

Perfect timing for halloween, the second half really got me into the story, especially the mention of the time zone change.

Now obviously this needs to be continued, but where do you go from here? This story reminds me vaguely of the story Elisa Milicent Sinclair (which from what I've read, looks like a real-life story) that is amazingly awe inspiring, romantic, and terribly sad. The ending is soul destroying. Worth reading if anyone is interested: http://imgur.com/gallery/lLCtX

But back Astrid Hitch, to I feel that if you're going to continue writing this (and you definitely should!), the romance side needs to start blossoming, and I'd like Astrid to start maturing slowly as the story progresses (mentally at least), and I'd like to see Karl slowly start to accept her as part of his life as she forces her way in.

I can just see Astrid arriving at his house the next early Saturday afternoon, his mom answers the door, she introduces herself as Karl's girlfriend, and claims she's 15 or something. An hour later Karl comes into the living room to find his mom and Astrid in deep discussion over tea. Lulz ensue.

Anonymous 16/11/17(Thu)08:14 No. 24822 ID: 0ee582

It is nice to see someone is still posting content to this board and not bumping threads that have not gotten an update in 5 years.

I hope your sfw writing is going well clearly you put a lot of effort into your work.

Anonymous 16/11/18(Fri)15:07 No. 24823 ID: 498abd

Just finished this unintentionally all in one go, thanks for fucking my sleep pattern...

Was worth it though since it turned out to be such a great read. I eagerly await the next addition to this!

In the mean time I'm going to check out your asstr...

Anonymous 17/01/30(Mon)01:20 No. 24908 ID: 4308b7

Welp, I'm afraid I'm going to have to be that guy. While I did enjoy this story and its predecessor, I was hardly enthralled with them in the same way that My Private Camwhore, iCity Tales #2, and some of your other stories have been able to suck me in like a heroin addict, for the simple fact that they feel rather derivative of Rent-a-Daughter, Friends Only, and (to a lesser extent) Molestr, among other stories that you've written. The "introspective and slightly nerdy average joe just trying to make his way in life bonds with an offbeat and quirky loli over their shared outlook on existence" trope just feels overused, and the protagonists seem like cut-and-paste author insertions. Morally ambiguous characters (or at least characters that have unique external circumstances) like Andrew/Erin, Mark, Alex, Nick, etc. are much more interesting than "generic twentysomething introvert male #397837". I mean, that probably describes you and most of your audience, so I understand making those characters to give them something to to self-insert with, but they still need a bit more flavor. You could swap the protagonists in many of your stories and the end results wouldn't change.

Also these stories tend to lack any external overaching narrative (like MPC's prostitution ring or RP's superhero theme) which you're quite adept at crafting and weaving into the broader picture, so they come off as a little dull by comparison. It's hard to derive much excitement from some morally uptight square debating to himself for the 50th time about the morality of looking up some girl's skirt (especially when you know he's eventually just going to bang her anyway) when on the other side of the AnonyMPCverse you've got Alex and Tabby fighting monsters and Andrew and Erin busting up prostitution rings while incest-fucking on piles of extorted cash. Of course there's room for different types of stories in the world, but I feel like Rent-a-Daughter nailed this archetype and everything in the same vein since has been somewhat of a retread.

Personally I was way more intrigued by the idea of the 3 girls attending a party full of older men than I was by the prospect of Astrid going back to give Karl the kuck his 107th chance to bang her, and pretty disappointed when things developed in that direction. I was even hoping that Karl would maybe get the desire to go check out the party to "make sure she's safe" or something like that, and then find himself watching despondently as she straight up NTRs him in a fit of drunken gangbang degeneracy (which would not be an unwarranted retribution for his initial rejection and avoidance of her). Now that would have been new, original, and interesting. Overall I feel like the whole diptych was a missed opportunity. It did a great job of building up a lot of romantic tension, which I suppose is what these slow stories are for, but it didn't do anything satisfying with it, and the whole process of reading it felt a bit laborious (hence the delay in this review) because I already knew that things would proceed according to the template. I know a lot of this sounds like "Oh, he just doesn't like more down-to-Earth stories without exaggerated narratives", but it's not that so much as I feel that this story wasted on a slow burn on a small flame. If there had been a twist, like my NTR angle, then it would have been one of your greatest stories ever. But as it stands it's a little plain: serviceable, but not memorable.

AnonyMPC 17/01/30(Mon)01:57 No. 24909 ID: a609fb

Fair enough. I know my main characters are often repetitive and similar, because hey, that's what I like. I also like the main characters who resist falling into various sinful behaviors but slowly get convinced, and yes, bonding with a adolescent girl over some shared interest is a big one of my fantasies that I like to explore over and over again. Not all my stories are going to go that way, but yeah, plenty are going to be very conventional (except for the underage and/or incest angle) and they may wind up seeming like cookie-cutter retreads to some. So all I can say is sorry-not-sorry but hopefully not in a bitchy way, just in a "I write what I like, wish I could please more people with it but I gotta be me" way.

But since this has been bumped, I might as well use the opportunity to mention to the people here that I livestream writing now occasionally on piczel, if people want to potentially peek in and see what I'm working on (generally, lately, on-stream it's been switching between Magic Marker, Phil Phantomish Stuff, and iCity, with occasional work on a Molestr sequel). http://www.piczel.tv/watch/AnonyMPC (you can also sign up for e-mail alerts for when I go live).

Anonymous 17/02/12(Sun)04:26 No. 24925 ID: 87dad6

I know I can't force you to do so, but please get out of this thread and never post in it again. Your unwanted comments about generic main characters may be best aimed elsewhere, and especially your comments on 3 girls dancing in a club with older men. The story we got instead is a unique and special moment, between a young girl trying to find herself, and being strong enough to avoid the greater temptation of the club, and instead turning to the boy who showed her kindness - to climax in a very intimate moment together, secretly, quietly in bed.

This story is beautiful.

Anonymous 17/02/15(Wed)05:37 No. 24927 ID: df0652

>I was even hoping...straight up NTR

Opinion discarded.

Anonymous 17/02/16(Thu)09:18 No. 24928 ID: 4308b7


>The story we got instead is a unique and special moment, between a young girl trying to find herself, and being strong enough to avoid the greater temptation of the club, and instead turning to the boy who showed her kindness - to climax in a very intimate moment together, secretly, quietly in bed.

That is arousing and morally inspiring and all... if you're a Mormon who wears special underpants to make babies. I think you may have missed the point that *erotic* literature is about titillation and taboo, not romance. That's not to say that I don't enjoy AnonyMPC's nuanced blending of both in most of his stories, but rather that the romantic aspects should nevertheless still be subservient to and used primarily to enhance the erotic ones, and that this story missed that mark for me. It's clear that a lot of people enjoyed it regardless (though I question how many people actually got off much to it as opposed to enjoying it more as a love story), and it's by no means a bad little yarn, but it still seems off-balance in regards to its fundamental purpose.

>especially your comments on 3 girls dancing in a club with older men.
>dancing in a club

If you're going to insult somebody else's interpretation of the story, how about you make sure that you actually have the basic facts about what even took place in it correct yourself?

tbh it seems like most of you just like it because it gives you hope that maybe some day something like this will happen to you. Keep dreamin' fellas.

Anonymous 17/02/18(Sat)04:39 No. 24931 ID: df0652


Perhaps you need to spend a little time off the chans if you can no longer find anything erotic in romance.

Anonymous 17/02/18(Sat)08:31 No. 24932 ID: 4308b7


Maybe you should spend a little more time reading Twilight, or browsing the romance novel section at your local bookstore. You don't need to browse small *chans to find stories with quiet, intimate moments in bed shared by two consenting partners.

Anonymous 17/02/20(Mon)01:57 No. 24933 ID: df0652


I do if I want it to be well written.

Non-Anonymous 17/06/19(Mon)17:09 No. 25065 ID: 9b0cce

Once again, very well written. I, for one, enjoyed the internal dilemma, and thought the characters were quite well built up; of late I find stroke stories rather dull without some significant plot or story behind them. Simply put, there's only so many ways one can describe putting tab a into slot b. Which is part of the reason i haven't been writing all that much myself lately...

AnonyMPC 17/07/14(Fri)15:29 No. 25091 ID: a609fb

Figured I'd bump this to let everyone know, since I'm getting a lot of people informing me: ASSTR is currently going through some server difficulties and a years-out-of-date version is showing for some people, including myself. So some of my newest stories, including the Hitch stories, aren't accessible there.

They did send an e-mail to writers letting them know the issue, and I assume are working on it (the email did give some reasons for which it's taking a long time, but unfortunately no timeframe) and/or looking into migrating to some other server (which they also said was a possibility).

Unfortunately, due to the nature of the problem, I can't even alter the main page to put up a notification of the problem to readers. So, thank you to everyone who's told me about it, but I AM aware and it doesn't mean anything other than that ASSTR's a very old site with admin who probably have lots of other stuff going on.

In the meantime, you can still find many of my newer stories on this board, or if you don't like reading in thread format, e-mail me through my ASSTR site (which still works) and I'll try to find some other way (but I'll be really slow about it too, I'm really behind on my mail).

Also, I do stream my writing several times a week on piczel.tv, it's not very entertaining but if you want to talk to me live, that's your best bet. It's been slow-going, but I'm currently sitting on a completed (but not yet edited, even to the degree where somebody else can help) sequel to Molestr, and getting close to finishing Magic Marker Book Two (the tail end of which is what you'll most likely see as of this post if you catch one of the writestreams, unless I feel inspired to switch to something else).

Anonymous 17/07/18(Tue)21:17 No. 25096 ID: 4c26a9

Thanks for the warning, keep up the good job.

Anonymous 17/07/19(Wed)20:13 No. 25097 ID: a3580c

Holy shit, I was just looking for this story. I remember reading it a few months ago but when I tried to find it again just then, I couldn't find it on your page! I was seriously doubting my memory and my sanity for a few minutes there. Thanks for the heads up.

Anonymous 17/07/19(Wed)21:14 No. 25098 ID: 5354c7

not sure asstr is sending my email I have a suggestion for a potential fix but don't want to get everyone's hopes up if you decide the fix is not for you

Monochrome!!V0LzHmBTIw 17/07/22(Sat)19:25 No. 25101 ID: ef02bd

You write very interesting characters, but the MC's resistance being such a massive thing ruins the flow of the story.

This is your brain on feminism - guilt even when a young woman you know damn well you want is practically throwing herself at you.

Anonymous 17/08/15(Tue)03:18 No. 25122 ID: d4e681

That story was perfect. Thanks a lot OP.
I feel very sad now.

Anonymous 17/08/21(Mon)13:53 No. 25131 ID: 383a20

because fucking twelve-year-olds is perfectly legal as long as you're not a feminist

Anonymous 17/08/23(Wed)23:03 No. 25132 ID: 9bb614

I'm trying to email OP but there's a bug on asstr.
(http://acctcgi.asstr.org/formmail.cgi is unreachable.)

So I guess I could just write it here:
Hello, I've been reading The Umbrella Hitch and Rent-A-Daughter. Those were really fantastic, very well written. I also like Roomates on /elit/.

The Umbrella Hitch is the best erotic story I've read. It's perfect.

I can't seem to find other slow stories like those three I listed. Do you have other one to recommend?

Thanks a lot for all the work. I'm a big fan.

Anonymous 17/08/24(Thu)20:20 No. 25133 ID: 1caf51

Are there any plans to continue the Relatively Powered serial?

AnonyMPC 17/08/26(Sat)17:54 No. 25134 ID: a609fb

Thanks! Yeah, I'm not surprised, ASSTR's been having serious problems (years old versions of pages being the only one up, for example) due to one of their machines crashing and none of the staff are nearby where the machines are physically located. From what I hear they are planning a trip in September to try and sort it out.

Unfortunately don't really have any recommendations, the one I usually recommend for such requests is Roommates which you already know about.

Eventually, yes, but I'm not actively working on it right now I'm afraid.

Honestly, not working on too much of anything these last few weeks, I was in a good groove of writestreaming, and even if I didn't have many viewers I enjoyed it and it kept me active, but then piczel had to betray the userbase and ban underage stuff, so that knocked the wind out of my sails. Not to mention stress from RL stuff picking up. So I haven't been writing much recently, but I'm hopefully starting to pick up again.

I do have a second installment to Molestr mostly done (still hasn't gone through even the first stage of self-edits and revisions), and still relatively close to being done on Magic Marker Book Two (I suspect I would have been done it by now if not for piczel's darkside turn).

Sorry, I know it's not the kind of update you want to hear.

Anonymous 17/08/28(Mon)12:53 No. 25135 ID: c9f60f

appreciate the update

IonIan 17/09/06(Wed)00:52 No. 25137 ID: ee0e7b

agreed- thanks for both the personal update and the info about asstr; that situation was incredibly confounding until I read this.

Asstr update and request Anonymous 17/09/09(Sat)17:15 No. 25138 ID: fc76f5

Hey Anony, thx for the update. Today I missclicked on my favorites and your page in asstr seems to be updated again (title says that your las update was on 2016). Is there any chance to see the scratch of "Magic Marker 2" posted in here? I really want to know what happen next.I really love your work!

Anonymous 17/09/30(Sat)13:42 No. 25154 ID: 769380

Why not writestream on a different site AnonyMPC?

Also stream MPC5 pls. I'm dying.

Anonymous 17/10/20(Fri)10:54 No. 25162 ID: 92463a

Of all the stories you could've announced being close, Magic Marker is the worst one. Read all of your stories except for that one, I couldn't finish it. The characters were weak and all over the place, and the story just didn't seem to flow that well at all.

Regardless, probably personal preference, I hope this one is bearable to read. Looking forward to your new stuff as always :)

Anonymous 17/10/23(Mon)16:34 No. 25172 ID: 36e3b1

Magic Marker is one of my favourites of yours, so I'm really hyped for this.

Glad to hear you're still writing!

Anonymous 17/10/24(Tue)04:13 No. 25173 ID: 310cb3

I just want him to keep writestreaming.


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