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Yes and no... You see, Japan is real but it's capital city, Tokyo, is not. At least, it's not what you've been lead to believe.
Tokyo is actually a moon colony, buried beneath the moon's surface on the Bright Side.
The Shinkansen system was initially an ordinary bullet train, bit since the Bubble Era, they were converted into mass-driver launched spacecraft. Every window is equipped with an extremely high definition screen to maintain the illusion of coasting through the countryside at a speed significantly less than you are actually moving (the gradual acceleration is deceptive).
It may seem like a lot of trouble to launch an entire metropolis of people to the moon and set up elaborate deceptions--even portals for aircraft entry--but there really was no other way.
In the early 90s, Japan discovered point-to-point teleportation in the midst of an economic boom, yet still the costs and materials were too precious for practical implementation. Then these... things came through the soft places product testing had made in the barrier between our worlds.
Original Tokyo was overwhelmed. In a matter of hours, half a dozen wards were smoking rubble. Then it stopped. The hero remains unknown, but survivor accounts told of last-ditch nuclear engagement. The cold-war cache, buried--by Nixon--in a secret silo in Hokkaido, finally saw the light of day; and exploded with a flash times brighter. The portals collapsed and all EM activity for ten miles out went static.
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It is not going anywhere. It is an over long bland passage of descriptive text that doesn't ground the story in any way. I assume there is eventually going to be a character somewhere, doing something within this setting? If so, start with that and scrap this crap. We can then infer the setting and history vicariously, through this character's perspective on the world.
>>proofread my post.
Like 17395 said, it's shit. Meandering, overly long, "As you know, Bob..." shit. You can't even get what little science it contains right, such as...
>>moon's surface on the Bright Side
The Moon doesn't have a "bright side", idiot. It's tidally locked to the Earth, but not to the Sun. Depending on the when during the year it occurs, the Moon's day can last between ~27 and ~29 Earth days.
If you're going to write science fiction, you need to learn how to write and you need to understand science. You can't do either of those things now.
>"Why don’t you wait over there--" she nodded to some chairs against the wall "--and I’ll give you a signal when he comes by."
>"Why don't you wait over there," she nodded to some chairs against the wall, "and I'll give you a signal when he comes by."
>"Why don’t you wait over there"--she nodded to some chairs against the wall--"and I’ll give you a signal when he comes by."
>"Why don't you wait over there,"--she nodded to some chairs against the wall--"and I'll give you a signal when he comes by."
There are probably more variants I could write here, like adding a comma after 'wall' in the first version, but which is the most correct?
I understand that different publishers/editors go by different house rules and more than one can be 'correct', but there has to be a majority consensus on one method, right? Or at least one method has to be more popular than the rest, even if it's split down to a minority.
So what's your thoughts on this? Which is the best way to do this?
That fookin' gif m8!
Grammatically, only the second is correct.
"Why don't you wait over there," - she nodded in the direction of some chairs standing against the wall - "and I'll give you a signal when he comes by."
hey /lit/ anyone know any books similiar to "welcome to the nhk" , also general great books you have read in last weeks
Eh, no not up everyones alley. I would not recommend anything I like to any sane or intelligent person. It is based on the City Infernal series however it can be a stand alone. Brief synopsis: Theology student Hudson has just won the lottery, but not just any lottery—Satan’s lottery. Only eleven people in all of human history have been so honored since Lucifer’s fall from Heaven in 5318 B.C. All Hudson need do is say “yes,” and he will receive an all-expenses-paid tour of Hell, and his tour-guide is the damned soul of H.P. Lovecraft.
cool, so there is kinda mythos in it too? sounds fun
Again not for everyone, most of Lee's stuff is what I would call modern Splatterpunk or extreme horror. If you want a taste check out City Infernal. I will be starting Hero With 1000 faces next week, thank you for bringing that to my attention.
writing is something that i'd like to improve upon. here is a first draft at the prologue to a story. it will be vaguely based off my life, and my transition from male to female over the next few years. strange subject matter but i think if i can capture it in some sort of semi-fictional and surreal way then it'd be nice.
interested in any comments. it's just a draft. The names and age have been changed to preserve anonymity. thx. please let me know if its good or utter shit. the italics and bold dont work? not sure how to do it :P
life is just a fractal
Dude, what the fuck? Facebook just erased my memory. Swear with my right hand to a fucking church. I was just…
go steal another car. stop being sad. like cancer.
The shakes were real and the nectar of my nightly forage was draped, slung under my eyes like wet bathroom towels and tropical…
That’s the new modus of operation for you, Honey. Who is listening?
I went back home and ate and played with an iPod but it wasn’t entertaining so I enjoyed a cocktail of entactogens, and an absolutely Edenous garden view. Appreciated it from the dry end of the glass.
More wine. Lightning. Abruptly so, anyway, because I…
she passes out often.
i wanted to help, but for her, all the doors had been closed.
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I don't mind the use of italics, they are the literary shorthand equivalent to black and white flashbacks in tv shows.
However, this comes off as pretentious and irritatingly opaque. If a mystery is a mystery because the narrator arbitrarily leaves information out that they can just as easily provide, then it isn't really a mystery at all. It's a case of waiting for the narrator to get on with it and paint a picture, as opposed to just hinting one is there.
It's pretty bad, I didn't read the whole thing, it looks like you opened a dictionary to random pages and dropped in words you saw. It's extremely disproportionate to the style of writing, I picked out a few things that bugged me.
>go steal another car. stop being sad. like cancer.
What is the point of this? Especially that last line "like cancer"
>The shakes were real and the nectar of my nightly forage was draped, slung under my eyes like wet bathroom towels and tropical…
What does this mean, "Nectar","Forage", and "Draped" are used so improperly here that whatever ambiguous enigmatic thing you're going for is not clear enough. A euphemism for masturbating maybe? Why did you wipe it under your eyes after masturbating? Is it a man or a woman?
>modus of operation
Don't fuck up Latin phrases, modus isn't a real word in English, leave this as modus operandi
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So I have "A Companion to the Literature of German Expressionism" and it pains me that it talks a lot about writers and books I will never get to read because they're untranslated.
What does /lit/ think? Anyone else read it? Anyone here that reads german has read any works by writters that are considerated expressionist?
I like to read. I will read whatever. I read this.
Then I read this. It was pretty great. Blair has some problems as a writer. I don't like his passive, morally blank protagonists.
I'm flicking through these just now. Interesting stuff, fucking bizarre.
finished this recently. the book seemed more anti-revolutionary than i was lead to believe. pretty enjoyable though.
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I just read this- I'll start off by saying that I really liked it just for the feel of Dostoevsky in my head. However, I'm a little conflicted as to whether or not Joseph Frank's interpretation is a good one. Conventional wisdom says D. was just almost mindlessly rebelling against nihilism and rational egoism (think what's to be done), but this guy says it was a deliberate parody of those ideas, and stemmed from a logical examination of radically extending the impacts of science. Can anyone offer clarity as to what D. was more likely doing. I'd appreciate it.
>A SCREAMING COMES ACROSS THE SKY
So this is Gottfried's scream?
you'll get there some day.
Does it go anywhere after the encounter with the Dragon?
The dragon scene is memorable and quite a high-point.
If you found it a slog to get this far, with only the dragon encounter as your reward, you're probably better off dropping it.
Grendel's worldview is shattered. With that, he's on a mission to rebuild and make sense of the world. If I remember correctly, the dragon makes a reappearance, but only as a disembodied voice. There's some humor, and some more historic insight, and a finale of fuck off from the author.
If you like reading realistic history mixed in with legend, modernized, and with much less philosophical emphasis try pic related. Granted, Vidal doesn't know how to do a proper dragon at all, but knows how to write other creepy freaks, vampires especially.
ITT: Books that have powerfully impacted/moved you.
When I was a kid I grew up in a very religious town and was smarter than the other kids I was allowed to be around (and several of the adults...). This book taught me that even though I was a genius compared to the people I knew, being pretentious is a bad call because there's always people a lot smarter than you. Even if you're outstanding, if you were put among your true peers then you'd be average, so getting snotty just makes you look like a stupid asshole 10/10. Plus, there are things more than/equally important to intelligence.
I could mention Bestiario and El Aleph as really relevant readings at some point of my life, but there's no doubt The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy is actually the book that have moved me the most. I'm probably an illiterate idiot.