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Discovery Anonymous 15/01/29(Thu)15:31 No. 23168 ID: b00e3d [Reply]

This is partially inspired by "Roommates." Feedback is always welcome.

You rub your tired eyes. Your fingers push and yield a few small tears to clear some of the sleepless grit away. You have school tomorrow. At least my homework is done, you think, at least there's no last minute rush to finish. The silent red numbers burn into your retina. 4:30am is ever so unpleasent to your senses and you shift yourself away from the depressing blue glare of your monitor. You make your way slowly to bed and collapse heavily into the somewhat dingy, yet welcoming sheets. As your eyes close you think, maybe I should have brushed my teeth...

"Anna. Anna!" You jerk awake to the persistent call of your mother. Step-mother. Whatever. Your eyes open to the streams of brilliant spring sun peaking through the blinds. As you lift yourself upright and sit you see your clock reads 6:45am. The pulsing semi-colon matches your slow heartbeat as seconds tick slowly by.

"Anna! You need to get up! Your father is leaving in 20 minutes and you need to go with him. I can't take you to school today." Step-mother pushes open the already ajar door and peers in at you from behind a basket of laundry. "You need a real bed, baby girl, you look exhausted." You nod slightly and attempt to blink away the glowing sunlight.

"Mom," you hear yourself say, "I need to take my driver's test sometime this week."

"Okay, honey, just let me know when you can and your dad or I will take you." Step-mother's receding voice ventures away toward undone chores. You stand to follow. "Just get ready right now, Anna, you have to go."

Shoot. It's almost seven. You look down at yourself. Cami, panties. Not enough for school. You look across your room for some scraps of clothing that might be wearable. Jeans, there by the dresser. Good. Bra hanging from the closet door-knob, check. You slip off your cami and stretch as you pull the garment past your head.

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Anonymous 15/01/30(Fri)13:14 No. 23170 ID: f5b1c2

I don't see how depressing grimderp and rape have anything do with Roommates.

Anonymous 15/01/31(Sat)19:09 No. 23177 ID: 036a9b

Is she going to call the police? She better call the police. At the very least she had better tell a teacher. Shoving a girl's face into alley grit is high levels of uncool.

Summer With the Family Anonymous 14/05/12(Mon)11:08 No. 21732 ID: b748ed [Reply]

This is intended to be the first part (or a planned but not set five.) This contains a male-female, consensual sex between first cousins.

Part 1

I spent most of my high school summer’s at my aunt’s. Aunt April lived in the up north with her daughter, my cousin Melanie. We were more or less the same age. I think our moms were pregnant with us at the same time. But while my mom still worked as the day manager at a Hooter’s, Mel’s was now a prosecuting attorney. So, a week after school was done I packed clothes and toothbrush and waited excitedly for the my aunt to arrive to drive us upstate.

“Hey!” Mel rushed out of to greet us when we rolled into the garage. I beamed and she threw her arms around me in a hug, “Missed you!”

I hugged her, maybe a little awkwardly. Mel’s hug pressed her breasts into me and her hair smelled like floral shampoo. She was wearing a long tee shirt and flip flops, her long cream legs stretching out from the shirt, knee rubbing against my crotch. Maybe a lot awkwardly. I reminded myself, forcefully, that she was my cousin.

“I’ll take you bags in, did you want to go for a swim?” my aunt said, and Mel immediately chimed in to second.

That was when it hit me. “I -- I forgot my trunks.”

“I’ll find you something!” Mel offered, grabbed my hand and pulled me away by the wrist.
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Anonymous 14/10/01(Wed)01:22 No. 22514 ID: 56dcd9

Please continue this story. Regardless of how fast it is I enjoy it.

Chalc 14/10/02(Thu)18:31 No. 22517 ID: cb7628

Glad to see you're back OP. Looking forward to what the summer has in store for us.

Anonymous 15/01/29(Thu)04:18 No. 23167 ID: ebe995

I think we'd all really appreciate knowing if you plan to continue this. It's a nice start; it would be a shame not to finish

Anonymous 14/01/06(Mon)22:01 No. 20604 ID: 9f21ec [Reply]

JENNY, part 1

I'd just graduated from University at the age of 21, and taken a job at a local bar for some cash to keep me going while I was job hunting. There were very few young drinkers there; most were men in their 60s or 40/50 year old couples. As a young, handsome guy, I got a lot of attention from the women in their 40s, and often returned that attention with some harmless flirtation. All in good fun, just a way to pass the time in a menial job.

After a while I started drinking there; it was the nearest bar to home after all, and I often got bought drinks by the manager or the regulars. It was in this fashion that I met a few of the 'younger' regulars: a couple in their late 30s, a single 40 year old woman called Carly and a 28 year old guy who all drank together a few nights a week. I started to join them and got to know them all quite well. The couple, Ed and Christy, had recently fostered a 15 year old girl, Jenny, and were desperate to get out for a proper night out and were regularly discussing needing a babysitter. Being a low-paid barman, I offered to look after Jenny for a night as I was desperate for some extra cash.

I'd met Jenny a couple of times at the bar and she was a nice girl; a little bit hyper and excitable but there was nothing wrong with that - she was still a young teenager after all. She always seemed happy to see me and i was always happy to chat to her - i was the nearest to her age, so i just assumed she was eager to talk to someone who wasn't at least 20 years older than her. I'd never really looked at her properly before - why would I really? - but one day I was walking through town and saw her in her school uniform; she had a green skirt and tights, showing off her slim legs, with some slight curves where her muscles were being to develop. Her top half was covered with a big baggy jumper, as usual, so I couldn't tell how she looked there. I didn't think much of it then, as I knew she was too young, and I saw teenage girls in their uniforms all the time - why should this one be any different?

Anyway, the night of the babysitting rolled around and I heard over to Ed and Christy's house. When I got there, the couple were getting ready, and Jenny was watching TV, wearing a baggy hoodie and sweat pants. She waved and gave me a big smile, as Christy took me to one side.

"Thanks for helping us out," she said. I looked at her up close. She'd really dressed herself up, wearing a nice dress that showed ample cleavage, and her hair was wavy, framing a pretty face which had a small amount of makeup on. I'd always appreciated older women, and mainly watched MILF porn, so when I first saw Christy I noticed her massive breasts, curvy body and pretty face highlighted by bright blue eyes, and so had fapped to her a few times. I made a mental note of how she looked for later on.

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Anonymous 14/09/18(Thu)15:52 No. 22457 ID: b07e95


Anonymous 15/01/15(Thu)03:15 No. 23112 ID: 5099d7

Man, OP back again. It's been so hard to find time to finish the story. I've been plugging away at it for months. Here's the next installment...

CHRISTY, part 2

While I sucked on her quickly hardening nipples, I slid her pants off. As soon as they were off, one of my hands went straight to her panties. I rubbed Christy’s pussy from outside her panties, at the same time I kept kissing her breasts. Her skin was so smooth it was driving me wild; I could feel my cock throbbing inside my jeans as months of lust was coming towards satisfaction. I could feel Christy’s panties getting damper, so I stopped briefly to pull off my pants. As she lay back on the sofa, I saw her eyes work down my body and stop at my groin – my cock was bulging against my boxers, and she stared at it for a while. I climbed back on to the sofa and on top of her, then removed her panties. She was now naked beneath me and as I resumed kissing her, I cupped one of her boobs with my left hand and slipped my right one down to her pussy. Her damp cunt got me riled up and my hand slipped between her lips and on to her clitoris. As I massaged both that and her breast, Christy pushed her groin back against my hand as her body started writhing slightly with the pressure. As this happened Christy started rubbing my cock through my boxers.

Just as with her foster-daughter, I wanted to taste this beautiful woman’s pussy, so before she could start tugging me off, I worked my way down her curvy body with my mouth, sucking her tits on the way before softly kissing the smooth, soft skin of her torso before arriving at a clean shaven cunt. I could smell her flowing juices, luring me in with that aroma, her pussy lips slightly parted and my tongue flicked out to her clit. Using my tongue, I spread her labia completely apart, allowing my tongue access to her mound. At first, I licked her slowly, applying gentle pressure as my tongue worked up and down her clit; the soft moans coming from above my head told me that Christy was enjoying this. This got me even hornier and encouraged my tongue to start flicking at her mound quicker. As my tongue flitted around her clit I introduced my fingers, slowly massaging her labia while working them further open, before slipping one of my fingers inside her moist slit. I worked my tongue faster as I pushed my finger in and out of her pussy, which elicited a very positive reaction; her body began gyrating and moans of pleasure were escaping her mouth.

Christy’s body started gyrating and shuddering more and more, but before she could come, she tapped me on my head and told me to stop. I looked up at her from between her legs. “Come upstairs, Dave, let’s get more comfortable.” I stood up and she took my hand, leading me upstairs to her bedroom. I watched her naked, curvy ass sway from side to side as she walked up the stairs ahead of me; I couldn’t take my eyes off it. When we got t Message too long. Click here to view the full text.

Anonymous 15/01/25(Sun)23:22 No. 23156 ID: 5099d7

More OP. I got so hard reading the Jenny section. Held off as long as I could but picturing Christy made me cum buckets.

Gullible - A Phil Phantom Tribute (M/g, inc, prost, implied: best, reluc, AnonyMPC 15/01/14(Wed)05:35 No. 23104 ID: a609fb [Reply]

Yes, it's another one of THESE again. Just something I did on the side while working on other stuff. Usual disclaimers apply, this isn't meant to be deep or especially good, it's just a quick raunchy idea.

Gullible - A Phil Phantom Tribute by AnonyMPC (M/g, inc, prost, implied: best, reluc, cuck)

You ever heard that old joke, about the girl who climbs trees? Every day she comes home with money and her mother gets curious, and the girl proudly tells her mom that the boys always bet her a dollar that she can't climb a certain tree, and she always proves them wrong. Her more world-savvy mother fills her in on the little secret... the boys don't really care if she can climb the tree, they just want to look up her dress and see her panties.

The girl's shocked, and the mother thinks that's the end of it, until the next day when she shows up with a fistful of bills again, and the mom asks about it, and the girl proudly talks about the boys betting she couldn't climb the tree. "Oh, dear, don't you remember what I told you yesterday? They just want to see your underwear!"

"I know, Mom, but that's why I fooled them... this time, I didn't wear any!"

That joke was around when I was a kid, and probably when my parents were kids, too. So the joke couldn't really be about my little Katie... but it might as well have been, because that's just the kind of girl she's always been... unaware about the underlying sexual motivations of people, and just plain gullible as all get out.

Now, I admit I had fun taking advantage of this when she was young and innocent, by tricking her into believing things. Innocent things, of course, but silly. I guess every parent enjoys that a bit, after all, we have things like Santa Claus and the Tooth Fairy and the Easter Bunny. I used to have loads of laughs telling Katie, say, there was a Bigfoot living in the woods outside of town, and watching her stare out the window every time we drove past, trying to see him. Or that we bought her at WalMart (I photoshopped a receipt and everything), or that if she swam in the creek nude she might turn into a mermaid, or any number of other stories that crossed my mind. I once drew an X in a sandpit and then 'found' it with her, and told her it meant pirates buried treasure there. Little Katie dug for a whole afternoon! I even tried that really old one about gullible not being in the dictionary... little Katie fell for it for the minute or two it took to look up. She was trusting, not completely dumb... she'd usually figure it out she was tricked, but far too late, long after she'd made a fool of herself, and if I was the one who tricked her, sometimes she would come up to me with an adorable pout and inform me that it wasn't really true, like she now knew it was bull, but she still wa Message too long. Click here to view the full text.

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Anonymous 15/01/18(Sun)06:02 No. 23130 ID: f5b1c2

That's some nice reasoning you got there.

Anonymous 15/01/19(Mon)01:42 No. 23134 ID: 363709


If he didn't want such a harsh response then maybe he shouldn't have followed somebody into a thread that's not even about him to whine about a post not even directed to him?

Besides if I never read another boring, generic story by that faggot it will be too soon anyway. Despite that I have only entered his threads once to give him some criticism on his stories. When it became clear that he is actively hostile to the idea that they could use some improvement, I left his threads and haven't been back. So as far as I'm concerned he brought my response on himself by coming to find me.

Anonymous 15/01/19(Mon)02:27 No. 23135 ID: 7d5e1e

>Every time a writing forum reaches a certain level of unpleasantness, people stop posting. I like the stories here, so I'd prefer that didn't happen.

Explain why /elit/ didn't die years ago then. This place has always been "unpleasant" to people like you.

My Supernatural Brother Mint 13/06/11(Tue)04:57 No. 19149 ID: 62b1d7 [Reply] [First 100 posts] [Last 50 posts]

Summary: Sadie's brother has always been beyond normal, what with his ability to manipulate people's memories, feelings and thoughts with a simple touch and to have every pubescent girl to find him irresistible, but when Sadie's memories start going up missing, mysterious debts piling up and her brother getting involved in more and more shady business, can she find out what he's up to before they both end up paying the price?

Contains: anal, oral, pregnant, bondage, mind control, group sex, interracial, shota, M/F, F/F, M/F/F, M/F/F+, M/M, incest, uniform (as in, having sex in one), virgin, masturbation, toys, slavery, traps, and probably more I'm not thinking of.

(A/N: Yep, I'm back. I'm going to try and keep this one short. I think that was my problem with my other stories. I'm very busy so I don't know when I'll update this next, but it won't be like my frequent hiatuses. Also of note is that while this chapter is almost entirely under-aged girls, the entire story will not be that way. The brother will help some people with...odd requests. On with the show!)


Her name was Sadie Hendrix. Her parents died when she was young and she remembered them very little. She was instead raised by her older brother with money he got from...interesting sources. After their parents died he somehow got himself declared emancipated, an adult and her guardian. How could he have managed to do all of this so young? Well...he wasn’t what one would call a normal person.

Sadie’s alarm went off. She groaned and flopped around for several moments, trying to get up the strength to turn it off. When she finally did she still didn’t get up. She felt stiff and weak. She had woken up this way for quite some time now. She also had a fever that would go on and off. Suffice it to say she seemed to have a recurring illness that just wouldn’t go away. Her brother had taken her to the doctor to have her tested for a variety of things. The doctors stated that she probably just had a stubborn bug and be sure to get plenty of rest. Sadie groaned and got up from her bed. Whatever it was, she hoped it would soon be over. She stepped into her bathroom and gazed at herself in the mirror. She had golden blonde hair and brown eyes. She also had freckles that dotted her face. Her body was also losing the stubbiness of being child and was beginning to elongate into a teenager. It made her look very mature for twelve years old. Right now however she was looking at her skin rather than her body. The paleness had seemingly faded from her cheeks and her eyes looked bright again. A week ago she almost looked like a ghost. Perhaps the doctor was right. She had a big night ahead of her. Every Friday her brother and she went to play laser tag. Lately, because of her illness, she hadn’t been able to. With all the wei Message too long. Click here to view the full text.

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Anonymous 15/01/08(Thu)11:52 No. 23087 ID: 371c63

Yeah, people are jerks sometimes. I know post validation won't help much, but on behalf of the people who enjoyed your story, thank you. Enjoy your life away from here.

Anonymous 15/01/15(Thu)05:53 No. 23115 ID: a00fa8

I liked it fuck the hates, good luck if you leave tho.

Anonymous 15/01/17(Sat)22:52 No. 23128 ID: 3d7113

Goodbye Mint, you are among my favorite authors. I hope you eventually return, but in any case I wish you the best of luck in all your endeavors.

Embarrassment of Riches KuroX 15/01/14(Wed)22:35 No. 23109 ID: 8dce1c [Reply]

Since people seemed to like my last story a bit, I decided to put this up as well for more exposure. Comments, criticisms, questions welcome, I thrive off feedback. I don't know if it matches the board's prefered kinks or not, but here goes nothing.

An Embarrassment of Riches
(futa, solo, masturbation, toys)

I like Saturday mornings.

Not because of any great affinity for being yanked from my slumber by wildlife singing or the sight of the rising sun burning off the previous night’s fog. The enjoyment is more prosaic, a pure bout of escapism from my shitty one bedroom apartment with its exposed pipes along the wall, my shitty dead-end job with its shitty bosses (plural), and my shitty personal life without any closeness or intimacy in the foreseeable future. It’s the moment when even I, “Crazy Daisy”, can get some measure of enjoyment out of my twisted freak show of a body and I am going to savor every second.

I take hold and whip the covers off from the bed, letting them settle on the floor, to be dealt with later. I fully open my eyes as I roll onto my back, grasping my t-shirt and pulling it up, staring at the yellowing plaster and broken fan on my ceiling as it goes. Hmm, that image won’t do, not at all sexy, so I close my eyes as I let my hands wander. My breasts never amounted to anything at all, barely enough there to miss qualifying as flat-chested, but my nipples were something special: plump and long and sensitive, they stuck out like the barrels of a pirate ship’s cannons and sent jolts of pleasure through my body that electrified me to the core. So they are the natural starting point, my fingers flicking them lightly, taking their time before massaging what little in the way of tits I can claim, then heading down my chest at a deliberate pace to my belly button, circling it lazily with one finger.

Goosebumps rising across my almost translucent skin, following my tentative touch, I close my eyes tighter and try to think of today’s fantasy… mmm a guy, bashful and submissive, a virgin? No. Not that, not today. Aggressive, mean even, with experience under his belt, that’s what he’ll be. What does he look like? He’s tall for starters, absurdly tall, like six foot seven and built like a linebacker – all muscle, but not too over the top. Muscular, tall, dominant, what else? Let’s take it up a notch further, make him black as well, and not the mainstream cream-in-your-coffee black, but the kind of deep, rich ebony that bleeds into being violet when he’s hit by the right light. He’s strolling through my door in mind’s eye, the small details filing in: shape of his eyes and lips, a half snarl, half smile expression on his face, hairless nude body with a long scar from his left pectoral down to his eight pack abs, his massive hands with scarred up knuckles, and his package – dark like German chocolate, the head a be Message too long. Click here to view the full text.

Jonathan [yaoi] Faberbinx 15/01/03(Sat)01:32 No. 23053 ID: c9ce2e [Reply]

Eh, so awhile ago I posted this, and my computer crashed so it was put on the back burner. Fixed computer, yaoi m/m , feedback appreciated.

My head feels strangely fuzzy and only now parts of my body are beginning to have dull feelings. I'm vaguely aware I'm moving, but the motion and sensation is alien to me. A slight pain spreads from my backside pooling in my testicles; I feel pressure and warmth. There's someone mumbling something increasingly louder behind me. I feel hot.

“Jonathan-Jonathan, yes,” he moans, moving faster. He grabs the lifeless shell's hips, lifting them, and forces himself deeper with a longer stroke. “Your pussy, mmm so good” he licks his lips and feels Jonathan tighten around him. The shell looks so much like Jonathan, even its hair is the same length. The way his muscles wrap sinewy around the athletic body, even the sparse freckles and tattoos – the very sight of the shell lying still excites him. The thought of former trysts with the real Jonathan spent in Melfroppe arouses him further. He spits in his hand and wraps it around 'Jonathan's' penis. “Cum for me,” he loves this part. Sometimes Jonathan is cooperative and they cum together, but other times it takes more effort, and Jonathan finishes in his mouth.

I can feel some things but my vision and understanding are foggy at best. It feels like I'm being attacked. I try to speak but it's truncated by the feeling of a strange pleasure and losing what little control I have of my concentration. I'm not being attacked, but there's a burly figure holding me from behind. The wet thick warm hand forces cum from me in spurts. The mumbling behind me turns to groaning sounds and then I feel fullness. The sensation of warm fluids flowing into me and caresses and a name, 'John?' I can't make it out. I'm being cradled from behind and have finally put it together. Have I just been raped? Why is he talking to me? The forced pleasure loses its grip on me - the anger boiling inside me fuels my panic. The predator hugs me tighter. I'm panicking but unable to move; I'm trapped in myself, furious.

“Jonathan, you're so beautiful,” he rubs his face on the twitching body. “I was thinking about you all week and I'm so happy we can be together like this. I can't stay long but I promise I'll work harder to see you later this week. If I could I'd take you out of here tonight. A few more days and I will.” He lays Jonathan by his side and brushes his black hair back, kissing his neck before reclining on the now sweat and cum soiled sheets. He always brings new sheets, every time, and he'll change these after he gives Jonathan a bath. He runs his hand from Jonathan's face down his chest fingering his freckles and lingers at his hands. They twitch slowly at first. He narrows his eyes, focusing Message too long. Click here to view the full text.

Anonymous 15/01/14(Wed)15:25 No. 23107 ID: 4f7809

short, but I like it, Keep going yo!

Wrong from Right (futa/male, cumplay, blowjob, humil) KuroX 15/01/08(Thu)18:37 No. 23091 ID: fc7b29 [Reply]

I know I’m wrong for this. Dead wrong. I know there isn’t any mitigating circumstance or proper context that would make what I’m about to do right. I know and I don’t care. This isn’t me, I’m not this kind of person, but I’m not a saint either; you can only push me so far before I reach my breaking point. My rationale, as thin as it might be, is that Alessandra hurt me. She hurt me, so I want to hurt her in exchange. And I know an eye for an eye leaves the whole world blind, but like I said before: I don’t care. And that’s why I’m in an upstairs bedroom with the lights off and the floor thumping to the bass of the party down below. It’s also why I’m on my knees and not alone.

But just to be completely clear: Alessandra made a mistake and that’s the only reason I’m in this position. I’m not some kind of manipulative evil mastermind; I just saw an opportunity and moved to capitalize on it. Maybe I’ll look back on this with shame and regret one day. Maybe I’ll be the better person one day.

Today, however, is not that day.


She showed up to the party, sans boyfriend, with a few of her friends and already a little bit tipsy from pre-drinking. Alessandra naturally made quite the entrance, shrieking as she ran into other friends, snapping selfies and keeping a tall drink in her hand at all times. I noticed her walk in and ignored her, no reason to cause a scene, right? So she managed to get the first shot in with a snide remark about my weight when she saw me bent over getting a drink. And of course her bitches’ coven tittered right along with her while I burned with embarrassment.

I hadn’t always hated her, but I’d never actually liked her either. Our relations had started off distantly cordial and had gone downhill like a Jamaican bobsled team, mostly due to her max diva personality not being able to stand the sight of someone… perfectly average…? I didn’t understand it. It would have at least made sense if I was some kind of threat to her social position but we moved in wholly different circles; she was the queen bee on campus, the biggest fish in a small pond, whereas I was just a struggling student; juggling full-time classes with part-time work and (almost) no-time for myself.

Still, I knew there was a non-zero chance of seeing Alessandra at the party, but until she actually mentioned my ass I hadn’t given any thought to what I might say to her. Instead I stood there and burned with helpless fury; unable to come up with a suitable comeback and unwilling to start a brawl. My face was hot, the back of my teeth hurt and my stomach was churning. It wasn’t a very good feeling.

With my buzz thoroughly ruined, I stormed out of the kitchen and sat on the stairs, scrunched up and alone; stewing in my juices for the better part of an hour. It must’ve shown on my face, because no guys ap Message too long. Click here to view the full text.

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KuroX 15/01/09(Fri)19:08 No. 23095 ID: fc7b29

Thanks. I have a few other stories in the wings, might post them here for :max exposure:

Anonymous 15/01/10(Sat)05:57 No. 23096 ID: b7b33f

That was amazing. Please keep this as an ongoing story.

KuroX 15/01/13(Tue)08:45 No. 23102 ID: 8dce1c

Ehhh... I really didn't leave much of anything to continue...

The Visitors David Ander 14/06/02(Mon)06:48 No. 21869 ID: 917657 [Reply]

The Following is a long story, and it will take a while to get to the wank-worthy bits.

Wednesday, June 1, 2016 2:04 PM
All Nippon Airways flight 7609
37,200 feet over the Atlantic Ocean

First Officer Alan Santos had just finished making his final check in with air traffic control in the United States airspace. He sighed to himself. “Four hours down 9 hours to go.” The act of the transatlantic flight had become rather mundane; with the advent of modern technology. Now pilots and copilots merely watched electronic screens adjusted dials and mainly allow the computer to do its work. Manual control only needed to be used in very rare emergency situations, and the occasional difficult takeoff or landing; The pilot’s job now seemed more to be keeping an eye on the computers More than actually flying the plane .
But thoughts like this exist in almost every line of work, and did little to make the time go by faster. It had been awhile since He had last flown with Captain Luke Cameron and he had not had a good time to catch up. He turned to open a conversation just a small light winked on his display. The master caution light shone a menacing a red as a prerecorded voice blared over the internal cockpit speakers. “Terrain, terrain, terrain.” His eyes immediately snapped the window as his hands reached the yoke. His body tensed, prepared to wrench the aircraft away from…what, he wondered. The Atlantic Ocean had no terrain to speak of, it was an ocean.
As he peered out of the windows, the aforementioned ocean appeared exactly where he expected, well below them a sparkling blue-black. Ahead, below and all around the aircraft nothing could be seen to trigger the warning.
“What the hell?” Growled Luke, his southern accent and years of smoking flavoring his voice. Allen spoke up, “Looks like another one for the boys at home to take a look at.” “The damn things only a year old, we shouldn’t be having these problems.” Luke said, easing back into his chair.
Alan silenced the alarm.
He was right of course; modern commercial aircraft were built or more accurately overbuilt for exactly what they really were used for. All Nippon Ariways had been the first to purchase the Dreamliner; arguably the most advanced plane in use commercially. Millions spent on R&D and testing; and another almost un-fathomable amount spent on producing the beast and they still had kinks to work out. Not that they would ever tell the public this. Already people had an unfounded fear of air travel, and took even the simplest of bumps, errors or problems sent the community at large into a tizzy.
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Anonymous 14/11/28(Fri)07:09 No. 22877 ID: 2b3fc6

Please come back OP

Anonymous 15/01/03(Sat)09:40 No. 23054 ID: 2b3fc6

I remain hopeful that OP has not died

Anonymous 15/01/07(Wed)06:34 No. 23081 ID: f5c349


I don't know how I missed this first time around, otherwise I would have provided my 3 penneth, for what it's worth. You asked for critique:

Only major criticism is that some proof reading would help readability a bit. It looks like you've spell checked, but that doesn't pick up context. I know it's difficult.

Other than that I really like it and hope that you come back to complete the story. It's has potential from what I've read so far

Harem Thief: A Nisekoi Fanfic (mc, ntr, m/fffff) Anonymous 14/05/18(Sun)22:32 No. 21789 ID: e06ffc [Reply]

Life as a background character is boring. Every day is the same, nothing interesting ever happens. Every morning going to school, every evening coming home, with everything in between full of the same, mundane, humdrum, banal, mindnumbing routine.

For me and the rest of the class, about the only interesting thing in our lives was the harem. Five girls who were entirely unreasonably blessed.

First, they were pretty. Not just pretty. Unreasonably pretty. The other girls in the class confirmed that only one of them wore even the lightest of makeup, but they were all so perfect and unblemished that they made actors and models look plain and awkward.

Second, they were rich. Unreasonably rich. They lived in mansions and entire penthouse apartment floors. They flew around the world, bought extravagant luxuries, sicced their servants and thugs on anyone who looked at them wrong, and didn’t even really have a concept of money that made sense at the normal level.

Third, they were talented. Unreasonably talented. Some were gifted academically, able to get a perfect score on any test while paying no attention in class. One of the girls was actually our teacher, a girl who had sped through school and college to get her license at only nineteen years of age. Some were gifted athletically. There were rumors of one even having superhuman athletic ability that let her shatter stone buildings with a single kick.

They were freaks. But the freakiest thing of all was that every single one of them had the same obsession. Raku Ichijo. Every single one of them was head over heels infatuated with the guy. The rest of us were absolute trash as far they were concerned, but he was a god who could do no wrong, someone they were more than happy to all shamelessly fawn over together. It was so fucking stupid.

Right now, we were supposed to be having a class meeting. There was a school festival coming up and every class was responsible for a project to try and raise some money. With the harem in our class, the obvious choice for the boys was to exploit that and go with a maid cafe. Only one of the freaks, Marika, seemed to like the idea, though she made clear that she’d only be serving one person in the classroom. The rest of the girls, mundane and freak alike, were against the idea, either from embarrassment, outrage, or a fear of having to compete with one of the harem girls and being humiliated by it. Our teacher, Yui, was more than content to stand by, too busy playing with Raku’s hair to pay attention or do her job.

It was dragging on and on and on.
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Anonymous 14/10/13(Mon)14:48 No. 22560 ID: 645cdd


Like so many others, I visit this thread regularly in the hope you've posted another chapter. So far, so very good! I would ask that you find it in your heart (and also hopefully, your schedule) to finish this. Thanks

Anonymous 14/10/13(Mon)17:27 No. 22561 ID: 6f3c84

Good god man, this is amazing! Breaking up a slice of life anime is apparently one of my fetishes.

Moar please.

Anonymous 15/01/01(Thu)20:38 No. 23045 ID: 15701f

Great work so far OP. Can you give us an indication of how soon we may see an update please?

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